Picture Book Contest: No Birthday for My Brother

I don’t usually post on Saturday…except when there is something special…which there is today!!

Susanna Leonard Hill is holding one of her FAMOUS picture book contests…the topic this time is a unique or unusual birthday celebration.  Please click on her link and visit…I know there will be lots of great entries!

 

Birthdays mean CAKE!

 

Birthdays mean opening presents!

 

Birthdays mean fun and games and balloons and friends!

In No Brother for My Birthday, a young girl doesn’t want her little brother to be at her birthday party because he is noisy and always in the way.  She finds a very ingenious way to dispose of him…but, almost as soon as he is gone, she begins to miss him.  Read on to find out what happens.  I hope you enjoy it!

 

No Brother for My Birthday

I’ve a brother, he’s a bother…told my mother and my father.

To my birthday he’s not coming.  He’s too noisy, keeps on drumming.

He can travel to Aunt Lizzy and to Uncle Elmo Frizzy.

So on Monday I got busy…worked so hard my head got dizzy.

Packed my brother in a big box…gave him cookies and his pet rocks.

Closed the edges, taped them tightly…glued the label, not so lightly.

Tuesday came and I felt sickly…to the mailbox I walked quickly.

Slid the package down the drop slot…goodbye noisy drumming marplot.

All day Wednesday, peace and quiet…no more noisy drumming riot.

Thursday dawns and I’ve decided…solitaire is too one-sided.

Friday night I’m sad and gloomy.  This big house is just too roomy.

One more day until my birthday…Saturday is NOT a mirth day.

Sunday noontime, guests arriving.  House is hopping, party’s thriving.

Friends are happy, eating, drinking.  I am sad, I can’t stop thinking.

Then I hear the doorbell ringing…mailman stands there, what’s he bringing?

There’s a big box, taped up tightly…with a label, glued not lightly.

Stamped in red I find a clue…return to sender, postage due!

Hear a rhythm, sounds like thrumming.  Could it be my brother drumming?

Rip the tape off, lift the corner…up pops brother like Jack Horner!

He’s the best gift of the lot, my noisy brother – drumming marplot.

 

 

 I had a lot of fun writing this story…although my husband is now questioning my morals because I’ve created a little girl who packs her brother in a box and mails him away.  Seriously though, I think kids will get a kick out of it…and will identify with the frustrations of the older sister who has to “put up with” her noisy drumming marplot of a brother, but then misses him so much she cannot enjoy her birthday party.  Oh yes, and I had to get out the dictionary to prove that “marplot” was a real word!

 I can’t wait to see all of the entries in this contest!

54 thoughts on “Picture Book Contest: No Birthday for My Brother

    • So glad you stopped by, Lori…and I’m glad you liked the story. 🙂 It’s so funny about “marplot”…so many people (my husband and sister included) didn’t believe it was a real word…I actually had to show my husband the word in the dictionary!

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  1. Well done, Vivian! I loved the pacing of your rhymes and I loved your main character. Interestingly, I felt a bit of this story channeling “The Tell-Tale Heart” by Poe. Guilt can be a powerful thing–Glad his brother turned out okay!

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    • I really appreciate your insightful comment, Anthony! Thanks so much for stopping by. 🙂 You’ve given me another twist on the story…I loved “The Tell-tale Heart”…yes, she hears a thrumming…could it be her brother drumming? Or maybe his heart beating. 🙂

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    • Just got home from visiting our twin 6-year old grandchildren…read the rhyme to them and asked them if they would be my focus group and honestly tell me what they thought…Emily said, “Please read it again!” Josh said, “I like it…it is wierd funny!”
      Your kind words are especially meaningful…I went to your site and realize how dedicated you are about critiquing stories…so thank you, Sabrina…so glad you liked it…I, too, can see the illustrations…wish I could draw them. 🙂

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