Hurray! You’ve written a picture book manuscript. What started as a spark of an idea has developed into a full-fledged story.
Maybe you have critique partners and they’ve given you feedback, but you’d like a fresh pair of eyes.
Or maybe you work on your own and you wonder if something is missing or if you need to change direction.
I’d love to help!
For $25, I’ll read your story (fiction or nonfiction picture book manuscripts up to 1000 words – please email me first if you have a longer story), using the track changes feature on Microsoft Word to comment directly on your manuscript with a letter that will address your opening lines, main character, story arc, pacing, use of picture book techniques such as alliteration and the element of three, and your ending.
For $50, I’ll do all of the above, plus include line edits and mentor text suggestions.
For $15, I’ll read your picture book query/cover letter and use the track change feature to help you create a winning one! If you are also purchasing a critique at the same time, the query/cover letter is only $10.
Here’s what other writers are saying about my critiques:
Vivian’s editorial eye is incredible. She found “lumps” that neither I (in 16 revisions) nor 3 other critiquers found –and made the perfect suggestion. Head slap! SO HELPFUL! After another revision, I finally feel that fizzy feeling when I know it’s ready! Thanks, Vivian! – Pat Miller, author of THE HOLE STORY OF THE DOUGHNUT, SUBSTITUTE GROUNDHOG, and many more.
Great comments—and helpful suggestions. Good stuff! Above and beyond! – Francis McCall, author of A HUGE HOG IS A BIG PIG and UNRAVELING FIBERS
SPOT ON! Your suggestions helped simplify the sentences, cut word count. and punch up the plot. This is exactly the type of critique I was looking for! – Melissa Stoller, author of THE ENCHANTED SNOWGLOBE SERIES
I really appreciate your dedication to providing kind yet constructive feedback on my work. You have given me a lot to think about — and it’s clicking! – Lisa Katzenberger, author and editor
I highly recommend Vivian. She has an editorial eye to help flesh out your manuscript. – Sherri Jones Rivers
Impressed by the breadth and depth of Vivian’s feedback — she even suggested mentor texts! – Allison Alley
Extremely thoughtful and helpful critiques. – Keila Dawson, author of KING CAKE BABY
I can’t say enough about Vivian’s ability to see the core of your story. She’s a treasure! – Beth Gallagher
I’m glad I sent my story and cover letter. I finally feel I have a clear direction to move forward on. – Leslie Leibhardt Goodman
Vivian pointed out what wasn’t clear, and where I could chop/chop words!! I will definitely be using her services again. – Polly Renner
“Vivian Kirkfield helped with the plot arc, suggested some vivid descriptions and made every word of the story count -THE BEST CRITIQUE EVER.” – Jeanette Koscheski
“I’m so happy I chose you to critique my ms. You understood my story and your suggestions align perfectly with my vision for it.” – Joana Pastro
Please email me at: firstname.lastname@example.org
You can attach your manuscript as a Word doc.In the subject line of the email:
CRITIQUE – YOUR NAME – TITLE OF MS
And I can’t wait to read your story!