TA-DA!
THE 2nd ANNUAL #50PRECIOUSWORDS WRITING CHALLENGE IS OFFICIALLY OPEN!!!

I am so very excited to read all of the #50PreciousWords entries. For those of you who are visiting here the first time, please let me give you a sentence or two or three about how this all came about.

March 2nd is the birthday of the incredible Theodore Geisel, better known as Dr. Seuss. Last year I put together a little contest based on Bennet Cerf’s challenge to Seuss to write a children’s book using only 50 words. And the classic Green Eggs and Ham was born. It’s true that the story has over 700 words…but only 50 unique words.
I thought it would be fun to try to write a story for kids with ONLY 50 words. With a beginning, a middle, and an end. I wondered if I could do it. And then I opened the challenge to everyone. Much to my surprise and amazement, there were 128 entries! Ayear has past…and it’s time to DO IT AGAIN.
Please put on your thinking caps and get busy writing. You have until March 6th at 11:59pm to post your story. Here are the guidelines:
#50 PRECIOUS WORDS WRITING CHALLENGE GUIDELINES
- Write a story appropriate for kids ages 12 or under, using only 50 words…they can all be different words, or you can use some of them over and over…just as long as the total word count of the story is 50 or less.
- It can be prose, rhyme, free verse, silly or serious…whatever works for you.
- Title is not included in the word count.
- No illustration notes please.
- Between March 2nd and March 6th, post your story on your blog if you have one and want to and put the link in the comments of this post. Or copy and paste the entire story in the comments of this post. I ask for the link so that people will visit each other and find new friends in the kid lit community. Please make sure you put your name in the post. If you have any trouble at all posting the link or the story, please email me and I will be happy to do it for you: viviankirkfield@gmail.com.
- Deadline for posting the story or the link in the comments is Monday, March 6, at 11:59pm.
- Winners will be announced in a special blog post on Thursday, March 9.
- Winners? Of course, there will be winners…and prizes, too!
21 winners…21 prizes…1st place takes whichever prize she/he wants, then 2nd place gets to pick, and so on. I will reach out to
- . A critique from my beloved agent, Essie White (some of you may remember that the winner of last year’s contest chose Essie’s critique as her prize…and she subsequently signed with Storm Literary Agency!)

- A seat in author and mentor Susanna Leonard Hill’s amazing Making Picture Book Magic online writing class (the first writing class I ever took and it set me on the path of writing wonderful picture book manuscripts).

3. A seat in author and nonfiction writing guru Kristen Fulton’s incredible Nonfiction Archaeology online writing class (that was the class that opened the door for me to discover the joy of writing nonfiction picture books).

4. Coupon for 50% off author Alayne Kay Christian’s ART OF THE ARC online writing class (this is the next class I would love to take).

5. Or, if you have already taken Alayne’s wonderful class, you can choose a coupon for 50% off an in-depth critique from her (when Alayne says it is an in-depth critique, she isn’t kidding. I had one of those…it is supercalifragilisticexpialidocious).
6. A seat in one of the KidLitCollege webinars (I’ve attended a few and they are FABULOUS!) OR $19.99 off a critique, donated by Jodell Sadler, JCLA Editorial Agent and Founder of KidLitCollege. Winner choses one and will get a special code.

7. A manuscript or query letter critique from author Rebecca Colby.

8. A picture book manuscript critique from author Lori Degman.

9. A picture book critique from author Anna Forrester.

10. A fiction picture book critique from author Ariel Bernstein

11. A picture book critique from author Rosie Pova

12. A book on the craft of writing from Rosie Pova.
13. A copy of Bunny’s Book Club from Annie Silvestro.

14. A book on the craft of writing from author Maria Marshall.

15. A copy of Hello, My Name is Tiger from author/illustrator Jennifer P. Goldfinger.

16. A copy of LIZZIE AND LOU SEAL plus an adorable SEAL NECKLACE from author/illustrator Patricia Keeler.

17. A copy of CLAMS ALL YEAR by author/illustrator Maryann Cocca-Leffler.

18. A SUPER HAPPY book prize package from author Marcie Colleen with copies of Super Happy Party Bears Gnawing Around and Super Happy Party Bears Knock Knock on Wood.

19. A copy of Mutt’s Promise, a middle grade dog adventure written by Julie Salomen…donated by author/illustrator Jill Weber.

20. A signed copy of Mr. Fuzzbuster Knows He’s the Favorite from author Stacy McAnulty.

21. A picture book critique from me and a signed copy of my parent-teacher book, Show Me How! Build Your Child’s Self-Esteem Through Reading, Crafting and Cooking.

WOW! That is some list of prizes! What a generous Kid Lit community we have! I’m grateful to the prize donors…I hope you all visit their websites, buy their books, and review them on Amazon. Did you know that when a book gets 50 reviews, Amazon helps promote it?
And now, before I invite you to post your stories, I wanted to share my #50PreciousWords with you. Hopefully, my story is a good enough example…with a beginning, a middle, and an end (and what an end!)…that is kid-friendly (well, remember those Grimm’s Fairy Tales)…that is 50 words or less. I hope it makes you smile.
WHY PIGS LOVE THEIR LITTLE FEET (50 words)
Everyone made fun of Pig’s little feet.
An invitation arrived.
Please come to Coyote’s feast.
Rooster knew the invitation was for him.
Cow disagreed.
They hurried to Coyote’s den.
Pig followed.
By the time his little feet got him there, the feast was finished.
And so were Rooster and Cow.
I always loved Aesop’s Fables and folktale type stories when I was a kid…I guess I was inspired by those.
Dear friends, please share this around your social media…the more the merrier… #50PreciousWords.
If you have any questions or need clarification, just email me: viviankirkfield@gmail.com
.Are you excited? I am!
Remember…THE MAGIC HAPPENS WHEN YOU MAKE EVERY WORD COUNT!
And I just can’t wait to read all of your precious words.
Luna the Caterpillar
Luna had an appetite,
munching everything in sight.
When full grown she worked magic
weaving leaves with silky fabric.
A cocoon! Then trick number two.
She stayed inside until wings grew.
She emerged full of pride,
spread her wings until dried.
Then Luna moth took flight,
flitter-fluttering all night.
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Aaah– the lovely luna moth. My favorite. Did you know the moth (not the caterpillar like in your story) does not have a mouth? That is why they live such a short time. Nice job here. Good luck.
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yes,I did know that. Isn’t it so sad. All that hard work to metamorphoses and then they only live about a week as a moth.They can’t eat. They mate, lay eggs, and leave this world.
Such beautiful creatures.
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Just lovely! A beautiful telling of the true and dramatic story of the Luna moth!
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thanks, Ingrid. I think Luna Moths (and most insects) are fascinating.
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I love this entertaining version of the moth life cycle, Linda. Great way to get kids into nature. A cocoon! Then trick number two. . . It must be magic! Great choice of words.
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thanks, Corine. It really is a magical process in a sense. Sort of like tadpoles becoming frogs. What a change. Compared to humans who are born tiny and grow up to be bigger versions of ourselves, the Luna moth’s transformation is quite fascinating.
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Love your passion!
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Great NF entry about the Luna moth, I really enjoyed reading this. You captured the whole life cycle in 50 words, great job!
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Thank you!
Did you know that a luna moth molts 5 times before making a cocoon? I tried to work that in but, well, 50 words…
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I actually didn’t know anything about the luna moth, which is why I liked your post. I enjoy NF stories where I get to learn something new. I think this would make a good PB; we always read about the butterfly, (golden child), yet not too much about the moth (the kid that sneaks out at night) lol. Great subject.
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Good point. I guess I could expand it into a book.
Glad you learned a bit. There’s much more to luna moths that couldn’t fit into the 50 words. So, your suggestions of expanding it into a PB is a great idea. Also, I agree with your “gold child” comment. And most of the butterfly stories are about monarchs. There are so many other butterflies to write about. And lots of amazing moths.
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What an educational #50PreciousWords, Linda…and you made them rhyme…I’m impressed!! I love ‘she emerged full of pride, spread her wings until dried’…great imagery!
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thanks, Vivian. 🙂
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Lovely story! It has it all: non-fiction, full plot arch, beautiful imagery, AND rhyme. Thanks for sharing it with us!
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thank you for your your kind words
🙂
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Linda, love the story. Beautifully written. Lyrical and informative. Nice job!
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thank you
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Fun NF story on the Luna moth. Impressed you were able to bring magic to the metamorphoses. Nice job. Good Luck
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thank you, Maria
🙂
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This is Stephanie Salkin’s entry.
Tree Entreaty
By Stephanie Salkin
Chickadee,
Sit with me.
You see,
I’m hopelessly
Stuck in your tree.
Poor little me.
Wait! Don’t fly away!
What can I say
To make you delay
Your get-away?
Phoo! You took flight.
Now you’re gone—out of sight.
I’ll be stuck here all night.
What now?
Descend? How?
Meow!
© Stephanie Salkin
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So very clever, Stephanie! I love the voice of Cat…very authentic…cats often think they can’t get down from trees. And your title rocks. 😉 Thanks so much for joining in the fun.
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Love that cat reaches out to Chickadee (as cat is not as brave as she looks, you see). Lost and alone, a foe becomes a friend . . .or not? Thoroughly enjoyed this Stephanie.
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Love the title and the delayed reveal. Thanks.
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Such a great twist to have a scared cat trying to make friends with a chickadee. What a fun MC voice and choice of wording. Good luck.
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Maria Bostian’s entry:
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Great use of sound words, Maria…and good pacing. I enjoyed taking Little Bat’s First Flight with him. 😉 So happy you played along with your #50PreciousWords.
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Had fun! Thanks for hosting the contest.
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Fun story of a bat on Halloween. Good luck.
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Thanks. Fingers (and wings) crossed!
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Pingback: Dog’s Tale – 50 words – The Seashells of Life
Posted story on my blog! Love this! Thanks so much.
https://theseashellsoflife.wordpress.com/2017/03/04/dogs-tale-50-words/
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Lucky dog, to end up in a home filled with apples and biscuits. Thank you so much, Savannah, for joining in the fun with your #50PreciousWords. I love your beginning…Once upon a dog, not a cat.
So original!
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Thank you!!
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Interesting opening and I like the play of words on “tale/tail.” Good luck.
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Thank you Maria!
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Thank you for the 50 Words.
Hide & Seek – NOT
By Marjorie David
By a tree, Arnie stands
10
With eyes covered, backward counts.
9
Along the sandbox BJ squashes.
8
Behind bushes Juan squishes.
7
In the doghouse Toby crouches.
6
Against the tree Arnie slouches.
5
Through sandpiles BJ plows.
4
After bugs Juan prowls.
3
With the dog Toby tumbles.
2
Close by Arnie slumbers.
1
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I love Arnie!
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Thanks, Ingrid, my daughter thinks Arnie should have red hair.
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This was very clever, Both the idea and the execution. Cool!
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Thanks for your encouraging words. I have watched many-a-game fall by the wayside due to distractions.
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Enjoyed your entry, Marjie. Love the fact that hide & seek is not exactly working out according to plan. Great ending 🙂
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Thanks, Corine. I love hide & seek, but it does not always keep the players’ interest when there is a waiting time.
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WOW…a counting book…with great action, strong verbs, wonderful imagery…and a humorous twist at the end. I love it, Marjie…and I’m so glad you joined in the #50PreciousWords fun. 😉
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Thanks, Vivian, for your kind words. I was describing the game as a mother might see it happening, but you told me about all the points I put in, without my intention. Thank you!
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Aww, little Arnie makes me smile– play till you drop– you’ve captured the joy of childhood here. Great job.
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Thanks, Julia, for your thoughts. I took it from a mother watching the game.
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Interesting construction. I really like your verb choices and the reality of childhood interests/attentions. Good luck
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Thanks, Maria, I am glad you like my little piece. The construction of my story is just off the top of my head.
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Trust
“Mom, will Spot die someday?”
“Yes.”
“Will we all die someday?”
“Nobody has ever lived forever.”
“And when we die? ”
“Nobody really knows.”
“Mom, are you sure that there’s a God?”
“No, that’s a belief. Have I made you sad?”
No, Mom. I’m happy because I can trust you.
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Being honest with kids is always the right way to go. What a lovely dialogue, Mel…you captured the voice of the child and parent perfectly. Thank you so much for playing along with your #50PreciousWords.
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Good morning, Vivian,
What fun and what a challenge for me to pare anything down to fifty words! But here goes…
Fledglings
“Our nest is too crowded.
It’s time we are gone.”
So Brother plopped down
while Sister clung on.
“I’m scared and I have a tummy ache.
My head is spinning. My legs might break!”
Then Sister saw Kitty
crouched, slinking below.
She took a brave leap,
squawking, “Danger! Let’s go.”
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Great job packing a whole story into that tiny word count. Nice.
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Thank you!
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Awwww…so cute! Sister finds the courage when her bro is in danger! Love the word plopped…Great job Mona!
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Thanks!
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Well done, Mona! I love that Sister screws up her courage in order to save Brother. Nice rhyme with a great ending. So happy you joined in with your #50PreciousWords.
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I’m surprised that you find it hard to pare down to 50 words because this read as an effortlessly spare and compelling story to me! @AnneLipton
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Thanks! Funny, because it usually takes me 50 words just to say hello!
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Fun story of fledgling birds and bravery. Good luck
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Thank you!
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The sea turtle journey
by Rita Antoinette Borg
Your limbs slice the sea as your ancestors did in ancient times towards ancient shores.
Seek your birthplace until
You cry, “I’ve returned!”
But few listen and fewer care.
Inelegant Mother Turtle in sand,
nestle your eggs of promised children, you’ll never get to see.
Then, return to open sea.
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Very moving, Rita! The life cycle of the sea turtle in #50PreciousWords…wow. Thanks so much for joining in the fun.;)
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Good job fitting the life-cycle into such a small word count. I like “limbs slice the sea.”
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I read the PB Tortuga Squad a few months ago. This would be a great pairing with that book. Thanks.
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Make-Believe a Story
By Rita Antoinette Borg
Dragon drew.
Rabbit wrote.
Red met Wolf, wandering the forest.
Red gathered flowers. Wolf dashed to grandma’s; jammed into pajamas and hid.
Red tiptoed into Grandmother’s hushed house. Wolf waited until………
Granny sprung from the cupboard, shouting…
“Pajama Party Surprise!”
They hullaballoo-ed until they snoozed.
Dragon imagined… Rabbit created… STORY.
Thank you , Vivian again this year!
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I love your author/illustrator team, Rita…and the twist at the end is super! Glad you came up with two #50PreciousWords to share this year. 😉
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Fun way to fracture a fairy tale, with a PJ party. And I love “hullaballoo-ed.” Good luck
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I love that your story is about storytellers
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50 Precious Words contest Entry
Boomer the Bullfrog is Big Stuff
By Hope Rethman
Plop! Swoooosh!
My cannonballs rock! I’m big stuff!
Show off!
Snaaaap! Gulp!
With my lightning-fast reflexes, flies don’t stand a chance!
Bragger!
Crooooak! Splash!
Look at those ripples. Too bad it makes the pond skater bugs crash.
Bully!
Swoooosh! Snaaap! Crooooak!
Did ya see that?
Did ya?
I’m sorry.
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Hope…your title rocks! I’d pick up a book with that title in a heartbeat.
Lots of fun sound words, action, and a main character who changes at the end of the story. Well done!
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Thanks so much for your kind comments. The entries have been so much fun to read!
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Oops, I noticed that the format for my story changed when I posted it and it may be difficult to understand who is talking. It was very challenging not using art notes. 🙂 Below is how it should read. Thank you!
Boomer the Bullfrog is Big Stuff
By Hope Rethman
Plop! Swoooosh!
My cannonballs rock! I’m big stuff!
Show off!
Snaaaap! Gulp!
With my lightning-fast reflexes, flies don’t stand a chance!
Bragger!
Crooooak! Splash!
Look at those ripples. Too bad it makes the pond skater bugs crash.
Bully!
Swoooosh! Snaaap! Crooooak!
Did ya see that?
Did ya?
I’m sorry.
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Interesting story of a braggart, bully who learns a lesson. Good luck.
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Thank you!
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I love how you use sound effects to conserve words and tell a story. Thanks.
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Thanks so much!
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This is an entry from Angelique Pacheco.
Garden Snail. by Angelique Pacheco
Small little garden snail,
What do you see?
I see the daisies smiling at me.
Small little garden snail,
What do you see?
I see the daisies eaten by me.
Small little garden snail,
What do you see?
I see a lady frowning at me!
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Haha! Awesome ending. Thanks for the laugh!
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Thanks Allison! 😉
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Haha, this was fun! Good job!
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Thanks Sandra! 🙂
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I wonder if you had more words to use, would she be stepping on him? Lovely #50PreciousWords from the POV of a snail…so unique, Angelique. Thanks for joining in the fun.
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Nah. I love snails, even when they annoy me by eating my basil plants 😉 x
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Cute story of a snail in a garden. Fun POV. Good luck.
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Thanks Maria! x
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This is really cute. I love the smooth rhythm and the refrain.
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Thanks Joanne! 😉
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I am having too much fun to stop. Thanks, Vivian.
Phoebe Sees the Ocean
By Jim Chaize
Phoebe floated from the car.
Salty air swam up her nose.
The rhythmic crashing of waves
drifted into her ears.
She fished out her bags,
and sailed into the house.
Happy thoughts bobbed.
Her swimsuit on,
she plunged off the steps.
Phoebe froze mesmerized.
The ocean was shiny and alive.
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So imaginative! Great work!
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Thanks, Allison.
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Wow! I love how your words transported me right to the beach! Well done!
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I appreciate your comments, Sandra.
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It’s like potato chips, Jim…you can’t write just one. 😉
Thanks so much for playing along with your great imagery…I love the last line…the ocean was shiny and alive. I could do with a little relaxing at the beach. 😉
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Thanks for your comments and for all your work on this fun challenge.
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Fun story of a day at the beach. I love the “ocean was shiny and alive.” Good luck
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Thanks, Maria.
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Really excellent. Beautiful sentences make the word count seem effortless. And I know that exact feeling of anticipation as you approach the Shore and the astonishment one never gets over when standing on the beach. Thank-you.
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The Princess
Laila dons her princess gown.
Stuffed lions guard her palace.
Dolls rush to do her bidding.
She has bears and kitties to tea.
When the King comes to escort her to dinner, she dances on his toes.
Her subjects return to their posts.
The Queen gives a kiss.
Sleep tight.
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This creates such a beautiful image of childhood. I’m sure the King and Queen adore their little princess.
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Lots going on with few words. I can visualize this.
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So sweet. Love the image of the Princess Laila dancing on her King’s toes. 🙂
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Very creative, Caren! What a beautiful picture you’ve painted of the imagination of a young girl. Thank you so much for sharing your #50PreciousWords.
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Fun peek into Laila’s imagination. Good luck
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Great imagery. Telling the story without actually telling it. Love this reading between the lines. Nicely done.
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Thanks, Vivian, for sponsoring this cool contest. I had so much fun with this!
Here’s a link to my entry, and I’ll append the entry itself below. It’s titled “Leprechaun Marathon.”
Happy St. Patrick’s Day (a bit early)!
~Michele Blood~
http://www.kidlittidbits.com/leprechaun-marathon/
The Magical Men Marathon
Drew smart, speedy, strong leprechauns
“I’ll train and I’ll try
And I will qualify!”
Soon Chris reached the top echelon
Winners were highly esteemed
But here all was not as it seemed
Chris removed her false beard
Every smile disappeared
“Surprise, boys! The name is Christine.”
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Awesome twist at the end – go Christine!
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Woo hoo, Christine! Great twist!
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The smiles on the audience may have disappeared, Michele, but my smile is bigger than ever. This was so much fun. Thanks so much for your #50PreciousWords and a mighty girl story and a limerick…nicely done!
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I enjoy the twist at the end. Strong girl succeeds. Nice touch. Good luck.
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Make-Believe a Story
By Rita Antoinette Borg
Dragon drew pictures;
Rabbit wrote words…………
Red met Wolf, spying the forest.
Red gathered flowers. Wolf dashed to grandma’s, jammed into pajamas and waited.
Red tiptoed into Grandmother’s silent house. Wolf hid until………
Granny sprang from the cupboard, shouting…
“Pajama Party Surprise!”
They hullaballoo-ed until they snoozed.
Story creation done.
I tried it again, added different words.
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Love the hullabaloo, Rita. Great beginning…Dragon drew pictures. Rabbit wrote words. Thanks so much for playing along. 😉
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This is an entry for Marty.
What’s For Breakfast? by Marty Bellis
“I’ll have purple eggs with jam”
said the hungry little clam.
“No purple eggs today, madam.
Would you care for orange or tan?”
“Sorry, no,” sighed clam and swam
off to hunt for purple yams.
Purple eggs? Purple yams?!
Perfect food for purple clams.
PS. Don’t forget some jam.
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Creative! Perfect for Dr. Seuss’s birthday!
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Dr. Seuss would give you a high-five!
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I enjoyed reading this! Very cute!
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Perfect for Dr. Seuss’ birthday, Marty…you were definitely channeling him with your #50PreciousWords. Think I’ll go find some purple yams to eat. 😉 So glad you played along. 🙂
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Way to channel Dr. Seuss, Marty! Brilliant! Also bonus points for purple, my favorite color!
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Really cute story. Good luck
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I’ve had purple potatoes and purple carrots…… clever and creative. Thanks.
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Sorry about the name, swimwarrior60 = Mary Rudzinski
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No worries, Mary…it’s lovely to meet you.;) And I loved Little Leaf. 😉
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For the love of dogs
by Rita Antoinette Borg
Dakota, the collie,
truly loves me.
Sweet Toby, the rescue,
rescues me,too.
Together they howl,
Together they growl.
Together they fight,
All day, all night.
Ma says,”Choose one!
You can’t have two!”
I say,”Choose one?!,
What should I do!”
I got Ma earmuffs,
Goodbye, huffs and puffs!.
.
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I love this! Creative solution!
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Thanks Allison, it comes naturally when you really have two dogs that don’t like each other!
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This was terrific!
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Thank you Sandra, I am glad I wrote and sent them yesterday as I woke with a fever today. Certainly not in a position to write
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So funny, Rita…and I love the solution to the problem. Very creative #50PreciousWords. So glad you joined in. 😉 It’s like potato chips, I know….you can’t do just one. 😉
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THis year though I will be doing only 3 not like I think 10 last year. It was an addiction then, and honestly I don’t even drink wine!! Thanks for the comments and thanks for the competition. A really great way to stir up the mind juices
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Creative solution for keeping pets. Fun.
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Thank you Maria! When you love animals you do what you can
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Been there. Done that. Almost. Love it!
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“Almost, Autumn!”
by
Monica P. Stoltzfus
Mommy and Autumn were always late to school. Because…
CLICKING, CLACKING…
“Ready?”
“No.”
SWISHING, SWOOSHING…
“Ready?”
“Maybe.”
JINGLING, JANGLING…
“Ready?”
“Almost.”
But not today.
“Let’s GO!!!”
RRRRRRRRRRRRROOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMM.
Mommy jumped out of the car and yelled, “WOHOO! We finally did it! We made it to school ON TIME!!!!!!”
On a Saturday.
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Haha! So many families can relate! I love the sound effects!
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I liked to think about what the sounds might be representing. It brings the reader into the story.
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Haha, oh, how I remember those days! Very cute story!
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Great humor, Monica…with a terrific twist at the end. I enjoyed your #50PreciousWords that many parents will relate to. Thanks so much for joining in the fun.
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LOL! You got me with your surprising ending. Great job!
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Yep, we’ve all been there at least once. Great ending twist. Good luck
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Funny ending! Great use of sound effects. Thanks.
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