Strike up the band! Sharpen your pencils! It’s time to show the world that:
MAGIC HAPPENS WHEN YOU MAKE EVERY WORD COUNT

Today is the day, dear friends! Ready! Set! Go!
The #50PreciousWords 2019 Writing Contest is now OPEN!

For those of you who have not participated before, let me give you a bit of back story. March 2nd is the birthday of the incredible Theodore Geisel, better known as Dr. Seuss. For the last three years, I’ve hosted a little contest based on Bennet Cerf’s challenge to Seuss to write a children’s book using only 50 words. To answer that challenge, Seuss wrote Green Eggs and Ham. It’s true that the story has over 700 words…but only 50 unique words.
In 2016, I thought it would be fun to try to write a story for kids with ONLY 50 words. With a beginning, a middle, and an end. I wondered if I could do it. And then I opened the challenge to everyone. Much to my surprise and amazement, there were 128 entries! The next year, there were 253 entries. And last year, there were 298.
To backtrack a bit, in 2012 I had a dream. I wanted to write picture books. And I wanted to be traditionally published.
And one of the most important things I did was to participate in writing challenges like Susanna Hill’s contests.
Why was that important?
Because it got me writing. It got me revising. It got me submitting.
Hmmm….writing/revising/submitting. I believe that if we do those three things enough times, our writing improves and agents and editors get a chance to see our work. And as much as I am thrilled with my own success, nothing makes me happier than to hear about the success of others in our kidlit community.
So, please sharpen your pencils. Fire up your computers. And share your #50PreciousWords with us.
#50 PRECIOUS WORDS WRITING CHALLENGE GUIDELINES
- Write a story appropriate for kids ages 12 or under, using only 50 words…they can all be different words, or you can use some of them over and over…just as long as the total word count of the story is 50 or less.
- It can be prose, rhyme, free verse, silly or serious…whatever works for you.
- Title is not included in the word count.
- No illustration notes please.
- IMPORTANT: Post your story in the comment section below. If you have your own blog and want to post your story there also, please do. And let us know your post link. I ask for the link so that people will visit each other and find new friends in the kid lit community. But no matter how many other places you want to post your story, make sure at least one of those places is in the comment section of this blog post…and please make sure you put your name in the post because some of you have very creative emails/avatar names and I won’t know who you are. If you have any trouble at all posting the story, please email me and I will be happy to do it for you: viviankirkfield@gmail.com.
- Deadline for posting the story in the comments is Wednesday, March 6, at 11:59pm. And if you plan to ask me to post it for you, please send it at least the day before.
- As many of you know, I am in New Zealand right at this moment on a round the world trip of a life-time. I am hoping to announce the winners on March 16th, but I ask for your patience and understanding in case something comes up and it doesn’t happen that day. Also, although I will be posting the winners on March 16th, I won’t start awarding the prizes until after I return home, on April 8th. But believe me, these prizes will be worth the wait!
- When I do start contacting the winners, 1st place will choose whichever prize he/she wants. Then I will contact 2nd place with the remaining prizes to choose from. And so on down the line. And here, for your dining and dancing pleasure are the wonderful prizes.
- A critique from Storm Literary Agency partner Vicki Selvaggio who is one of the finest agents and loveliest people I know.

- A picture book or chapter book or MG critique with Clear Fork editor Callie Metler-Smith.

- A seat in Susanna Leonard Hill’s MAKING PICTURE BOOK MAGIC: This is the first picture book writing class I took in February 2014..it was a stellar foundation and it has served me well. Susanna is an amazing mentor and a seat in her class can be life-changing!

- A seat in Mira Reisberg’s Children’s Book Academy class on HUMOR – how to find it in your heart and how to write it into your picture books. I have not taken this class yet…but I know I should: https://childrensbookacademy.teachable.com/p/let-s-get-funny-writing-humor-for-kids1

- A complimentary viewing of Alayne Kaye Christan’s latest webinar: Top Ten Reason’s for Rejections.
If you want tips on some corrective action that you might take to improve your chances of submission success, and/or if you would like to deepen your understanding of plot and arc, this webinar is for you.

Alayne Kay Christian is the content and developmental editor for Blue Whale Press and an award-winning children’s book author. She is the creator and teacher of a picture book writing course, Art of Arc. She has been a professional picture book and chapter book critique writer since 2014. And worked as a critique ninja for Julie Hedlund’s 12 X 12 for three years. Alayne is a graduate of the Institute for Children’s Literature and she has spent the last eleven years studying under some of the top names in children’s literature.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Lindsay Metcalf
Photo courtesy: Anna Jackson Photography
Lindsay H. Metcalf is a children’s author, poet, reporter, and former editor for The Kansas City Star. She will debut with two nonfiction picture books in 2020. In the fall of that year, Charlesbridge will release Taking the Mic: Fourteen Young Americans Making History, a poetic anthology co-edited by Lindsay, Jeanette Bradley, and Keila V. Dawson, and illustrated by Bradley. It features fourteen contemporary young activists, each spotlighted by a well-known poet. Subjects include literacy activist Marley Dias, water protector Jasilyn Charger, Scout for Equality founder Zach Wahls, and immigration reformer Viridiana Sanchez Santos. Contributors include Nikki Grimes, Joseph Bruchac, Lesléa Newman, and Guadalupe García McCall. Details about Lindsay’s second nonfiction picture book will be forthcoming. To learn more about her books and paid critique services, please reach out on lindsayhmetcalf.com or on Twitter @lindsayhmetcalf.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Melissa Stoller.

Melissa Stoller is the author of the chapter book series The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection – Book One: Return to Coney Island and Book Two: The Liberty Bell Train Ride (Clear Fork Publishing, 2017 and 2019); and the picture books Scarlet’s Magic Paintbrush and Ready, Set, GOrilla! (Clear Fork, 2018). Upcoming releases include Return of the Magic Paintbrush and Sadie’s Shabbat Stories (Clear Fork, 2019). She is also the co-author of The Parent-Child Book Club: Connecting With Your Kids Through Reading (HorizonLine Publishing, 2009). Melissa is an Assistant and Blogger for the Children’s Book Academy, a Regional Ambassador for The Chapter Book Challenge, a Moderator for The Debut Picture Book Study Group, and a volunteer with the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators/MetroNY. Melissa has worked as a lawyer, legal writing instructor, freelance writer and editor, and early childhood educator. Additionally, she is a member of the Board of Trustees at The Hewitt School and at Temple Shaaray Tefila. Melissa lives in New York City with her husband, three daughters, and one puppy.
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- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Amber Hendricks.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Sherry Howard.

Sherry Howard lives in Middletown, Kentucky, in a household busy with kids and pets. She worked as an educator, and now has the luxury of writing full time. Her debut picture, Rock and Roll Woods, released in October, 2018. And her middle grade NF, Deep Sea Divers, just released. She has quite a few books in the pipeline for publication soon.
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- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Julie Abery.

Mother. Writer. Teacher of the very young. I live in Switzerland with my partner and Tilly, the Springer Spaniel.
I ❤️ my job (it’s not every day you get to be an honorary five year old!)
I ❤️ chocolate (I live in Switzerland after all!)
I ❤️ walking the dog (well, I did eat all the chocolate!)
I ❤️ picture books!
If you would like to learn more about me, please visit
http://www.stormliteraryagency.com/our-authors-and-artists/
- Picture book critique from author Tina Cho.

Tina Cho is the author of four picture books– Rice from Heaven: The Secret Mission to Feed North Koreans (Little Bee Books/Bonnier Publishing August 2018), Korean Celebrations (forthcoming Tuttle 2019), Breakfast with Jesus (forthcoming Harvest House 2020), and a new sale yet to be announced. Although she grew up and taught in the United States, she currently lives in South Korea with her husband and two children while teaching at an international school.
- Picture book critique from author Carrie Finison.

Carrie Finison began her literary career at the age of seven with an idea, a box of markers, and her father’s typewriter. She has been writing off and on ever since, though she has (somewhat regretfully) traded in the typewriter for a laptop. Her poems and stories for children have appeared in Babybug, Ladybug, High Five, and Highlights magazines, and her debut picture book,DOZENS OF DOUGHNUTS, illustrated by Brianne Farley, will be published by Putnam in 2020. She lives outside Boston with her husband, son, daughter, and two cats who permit her to write in their cozy attic office. Find her online atwww.carriefinison.com or on Twitter @CarrieFinson.
- Picture book critique from Maria Marshall

Maria is a children’s author, blogger, and poet passionate about making nature fun for children. She was a round 2 judge for the 2018 & 2017 Cybils Awards. And a judge for the #50PreciousWords competition since its inception. Two of her poems are published in The Best Of Today’s Little Ditty 2016 and 2014-2015 anthologies. She is the parent of two amazing adults and lives in the Pacific Northwest with two Pixie Bob cats. When not writing, critiquing, or reading, she bird watches, travels the world, bakes, and hikes. The Picture Book Buzz
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- Signed copy of book by Laura Sassi

Laura Sassi has a passion for telling stories in prose and rhyme. Her picture books include GOODNIGHT, MANGER (Zonderkidz, 2015), GOODNIGHT, ARK (Zonderkidz, 2014), DIVA DELORES AND THE OPERA HOUSE MOUSE (Sterling, 2018) and LOVE IS KIND (Zonderkidz, 2018). She lives in New Jersey with her husband, two children, and a black Cockapoo named Sophie. She is represented by Lara Perkins of the Andrea Brown Literary Agency and you can learn more about her and her books at https://laurasassitales.wordpress.com/
- Signed copy of THE MASTERPIECE by Shelley Kinder

Shelley lives in Indiana with her family and loves writing for little people. Not So Scary Jerry (2017) was her first picture book. The Masterpiece (2018) is her second. Its original version got eleventh place in Vivian’s #50PreciousWords Contest in 2016
A big thank you to all of our amazing prize donors! Much appreciation to illustrator Vicky Fang whose awesome logo graces our challenge! And a grateful thank you to my dear friends and critique buddies, Maria Marshall, Julie Abery, and Diane Tulloch who will be helping me read and comment.
Last year there were almost 2000 comments – ALL OF THEM POSITIVE AND ENCOURAGING! I am so proud to be a part of this amazing kidlit community. Our news stations and politicians could definitely learn something from us.
And before I leave you to post your stories and comment on those you have a chance to read, I thought it would only be fair if I posted my sample of a 50-word story. I hang my head in shame because I am using the same story I wrote for last year’s post. I hope you will forgive me, preparations for my book launches and trip did not allow me time to write a new one, but I did want to put up an example for those who haven’t participated before. And maybe it will be new to them!
WHY THE STARS TWINKLE (49 words)
It was Sun’s birthday.
Moon gathered paper, paint,
glitter and glue to make a card.
But Wind blew.
Glitter and glue covered the stars.
“Now I have no gift for Sun,” cried Moon.
“Twinkling stars are the best present of all,” said Sun.
And Moon glowed all night long.
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Remember, if you have any questions or concerns, please email me at: viviankirkfield@gmail
I ask for your patience and understanding if I don’t get back to you right away…but please don’t stress…if you write a story and have trouble posting it, just email me. As long as your email gets to me time stamped before the contest closes, I will make sure your story is entered. Right at this moment, I am in Auckland, New Zealand, participating in library and school story times, reading FOUR OTTERS TOBOGGAN: AN ANIMAL COUNTING BOOK, PIPPA’S PASSOVER PLATE, and SWEET DREAMS, SARAH! How lucky can aa girl get???
And I am so looking forward to reading all of your precious words!
Hello everyone,
I have enjoyed reading all the wonderful entries. It’s amazing what can be done with 50 words!
Please check out my entry on my blog and I’ll post below too.
https://www.evelynbookless.com/blog/50-precious-words
Thanks for organizing this fun contest Vivian. I hope your travels have been fabulous and fun.
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KING OF THE COUCH (50 words) by Evelyn Bookless
One eye opens, then the other.
I bolt upright.
PLAYTIME!
I race downstairs,
with a plan in my head.
Cushions, blankets and the couch will do.
I lift and squeeze and shove.
CRASH!
I start again.
Lift. Squeeze. Nudge.
Finally! I’m king of the castle.
Now where’s my breakfast banquet?
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“Now where’s my breakfast banquet” makes me laugh every time because it’s absolutely something my kids would think/say. This is really cute. Nicely done!
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I love the title King of the Couch and all the energy of the race downstairs and building a cushion castle. 🙂
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Such fun building cushion and blanket castles. Love the energy and imperiousness of the MC. Well done.
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My grandson’s favorite game was building a fort/castle…and having me join him underneath the chairs/cushions/blankets. Well done, Evelyn…you captured a child’s voice perfectly.
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Beautiful action packed story of a child’s playtime. Love it.
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Great job on an original story that is fun to read aloud!
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Caterpillar
(45 words)
By Betty Collerson
Chomp, chomp, chomp…
The ravenous caterpillar
wriggles from leaf to leaf,
gets fat and grows.
Then, one day…
it stops eating.
Wraps itself in a magic cape,
and presto! A chrysalis emerges.
Ten days later, give or take,
it sets free its most splendid host.
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I think you have the same entry a bit earlier in this comment thread, Betty…lovely visuals!
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I squeaked out an entry finally. It comes in at 49 words. I hope you enjoy it.
Operation The Cheese Stands Alone (Gregory E. Bray)
Nibbles spied the cheese through binoculars and said, “The cat’s away. We need a Brielliant plan to get the cheese.”
“Yes, a cheddar one than last time,” responded Squeakers.
Nibbles scanned further and exclaimed, “Sacre blue cheese! The cat is disguised as a soufflé.”
“That’s no Gouda,” said Squeakers.
Also posted on my blog: https://gregoryebrayauthor.blogspot.com/2019/03/vivian-kirkfields-50-precious-word.html
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I love the word play! You’re making me hungry for cheese!
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I’m always hungry for cheese. =) Thanks, Patricia.
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This is really cute! Love all the cheesy puns!
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Thankyou, Danielle.
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This made me giggle, Greg! Nicely done.
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Thank you! =)
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Oh those cheesy puns! Chuckling, through the groans. But I do love the cat “disguised as a souffle.” Great job Greg.
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Thank you, Maria. =)
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You are so clever, Gregory! I really enjoyed all of your puns…and now I’m hungry for some yummy cheese. 😉
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I’m always hungry for cheese. Thank you, Vivian for your kind words.
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Love the word play and the mice names. Very clever. Love it.
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The Eager Bunny – By Fabiola Lambert (50 Words)
One – two flop!
Learning to hop is supposed to be easy – not for me.
I can try to walk like a human – nope, not easy.
I can try and fly like a bird! – Ouch! That hurt.
Maybe it’s not meant to be…
One – two flop! One – two.. One…two!…..HOP!
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Poor little bunny. Glad s/he kept trying. I like your internal rhyme and your title sums up this MC so well. Nice job.
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Nice presentation of practice makes perfect and be true to yourself…well done, Fabiola.
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I love the persistence of the eager Bunny. Beautifully written.
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Something lost, something found….by Deb Sullivan (48 words)
Jude beamed. Ms. Hammond was back in class! But no smile.
She cradled a picture.
“Are you sad?” asked Jude.
“Yes.”
“Did you lose something?” asked Jude.
“I did.”
Jude gave Ms. Hammond his glasses.
“I hope you find it.”
Ms. Hammond put down the picture. And smiled.
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This really evoked great memories for me, teaching in the classroom and the kindness children can show.
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Same here! I love that kids can surprise us with kindness – such an important message! Reminds me of Pat Zietlow Miller’s “Be Kind.” Nicely done, Deb!
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This is so incredibly sweet, Deb. This story is going to stay with me. ❤
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Lovely. Full of heart. Nicely done, Deb.
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Your story has all the feels; great loss and a touching “aww” ending. It is quite powerful. Very well done.
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Lots of emotion in only 50 words…well done, Deb. As a former teacher, I, too, encountered kids who were incredibly kind.
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Hi Vivian – Thank you so much for your thoughtful reply. How you find the time to make such meaningful comments to so many writers is beyond me. You’re amazing. Thanks again for your feedback – truly appreciate it. Best,Deb
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Lovely that kids can show kindness towards their teachers. I remember we used to give our teacher an apple on special days. 🙂
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Thank you, Vivian, for creating #50PreciousWords.
SATURDAY WITH POP POP
By: Aimee Satterlee
(48 Words)
Red truck
Jazz blasting
Pop Pop’s here!
Glazed donuts
Newspaper
Easy chair
OH NO! SNORING!
Whoooh! WHOOOH!
Train whistle
Run
Wave to the caboose
Piggybacks
Down country lane
Honeysuckle sweet
Fly fishing
Sunset
Nothing caught
Stars appear
Rod aimed skyward
Casts
Pop Pop catches
One twinkle for me.
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What a lovely tribute to PopPop!
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Thanks, Nancy. I appreciate your kind words. It truly is a tribute. My father passed away before my three children were born. I wrote this thinking about what a day with their Pop Pop might have looked like if he were still with us.
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That last line is so sweet. This is a beautiful tribute. Really well done!
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Thanks so much, Danielle! My dad literally was the worst fly fisherman–never caught one fish in my whole childhood. But he was the best dad ever. He would have caught every star in the sky for us. Thanks again for your kind words.
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Beautiful! I love all the imagery. Good luck in the contest.
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I’m grateful for your kind words. Good luck to you as well!
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Beautiful tribute. Reminds me of moments with my grandfather. Donuts, piggybacks and honeysuckle. Loved your last line. Excellent job.
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Thank you so much, Maria. I’m glad you were able to make personal connections from this piece to your own grandfather. Now if the snow would just make way for the honeysuckle . . .
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Love all of your wonderful images, Aimee…thank you for sharing your precious words with us. 😉
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Thank you, Vivian. I literally would not have done this piece and gone down “memory road” if not for the 50 Precious Words.
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Beautiful and lovely imagery of time spent with Pop Pop. Nicely done.
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STRANGE THINGS HAPPENED
By Amanda Davis
Strange things happened when the snow fell.
Right outside my window.
Snow leopards danced across rooftops,
polar bears the size of King Kong stomped the street,
and snowflakes turned to marshmallows.
I blinked.
Plop!
A marshmallow in my hot chocolate.
I sipped.
Amazed.
Strange things happened when the snow fell.
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Love this vision of wintry weather!
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Thank you, Patricia! We are getting a lot of snow here in New England, so I was feeling inspired! What fun it is to read everyone’s work!
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I like the imagery. It is very creative as well!
All the best,
Lily
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Thanks so much, Lily! 🙂
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🙂
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Love the fun, imaginative imagery! Really well done!
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Thanks, Danielle!
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I love the visuals here too. Nicely done, Amanda.
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Thank you! 🤗
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This is lots of fun. I could imagine you expanding it into a PB and the amazing illustrations of all the strange things that happened when it snowed. Great job.
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Thanks so much, Maria! Hopefully one day 😁
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Totally right about the snow images, Amanda…and I’ll have a marshmallow in my hot chocolate also, please. 😉
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Thanks, Vivian! Maybe stranger things will appear when it all melts!! 😉
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Love the white wintery feel this has. Nice job.
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This is gorgeous!
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Thank you all for sharing your 50 precious words. There are so many wonderful stories here! Thank you Vivian for organizing, commenting, sharing, and inspiring this wonderful challenge. Congrats to all for conquering! Cheers!
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ACHOO
by Susan Erickson
DearMeErickson.com
(46 words)
I know you’re feeling blue.
Achoo.
I wish it wasn’t true.
Achoo.
You have better things to do.
Achoo.
Wish I could just make it shoo.
Achoo.
I’d send it to timbuktu.
Achoo.
Here’s a tissue.
Achoo.
Poor you.
Achoo!
Boohoo. The flu.
ACHOO!
Bless you.
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I could feel how badly the sneezing person felt! Well done!
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I was thinking the same thing! Love the way you structured your story.
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I like the unusual rhyme of Timbuktu and tissue. It really makes you feel for the poor “sicky.” Nice job.
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Hello Susan…bless you for writing a story that brought a smile to my face…very clever…and kids would have a lot of fun with this!
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Lovely structure of this story. Now I feel a case of sneezes coming on. 🙂
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Dancing Birds
(48 words)
Merritt the parrot was green with envy, feeling blue, when she spied Sylvia Swan’s sparkly tutu. Feathers ruffled, Merritt squawked, “I want one, too!”
Sylvia pecked. Off flew the tutu. She chirped, “For you, my friend! Please wear it. This tutu is perfect – for a colorful parrot.”
Thanks for reading! I also posted it on my blog: https://patricianozell.com/2019/03/04/dancing-birds-50-precious-words-writing-contest/
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I like tutu wearing parrots. Nice work, Patricia.
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Aww! We need more Sylvia’s in the world. She is a model Swan! Very fun and visual. Nice job!
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Fun rhythm and rhyme Pat. While I agree that a parrot in a tutu would be a great image, so would a swan. Humor and kindness all rolled into one. Great job!
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Thank you!
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I love your characters, Patricia! And what a good friend Sylvia was…giving up her tutu to help make Merritt happier. 🙂
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Aww this was cute. Good luck.
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Great story Patricia!
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I am a Princess!
(49 words)
Mama became a lawyer.
Grandma joined the Peace Corps.
Nana is an artist.
I am a princess.
Mama’s brief case.
Grandma’s sari.
Nana’s truck.
My tiara.
Mama argues.
Grandma teaches.
Nana paints.
I rule.
I might study stars or train horses or be president!
Today I am a princess!
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Love all of the accomplished women & the dreams of your little princess, Robin! Well written!
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I love that you gave us the career/”tool of the trade”/& personalities of three generations of strong, capable women AND left your “princess’ ” door wide open to be anything else tomorrow – all in 49 words. Wow!
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Robin…I think you have something here…I love that you’ve got some strong women for the ‘princess’ to model…nicely done!
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Love the voice and the strong women role models for this little princess. Very cute. Love it.
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Stinky Cat (50 words)
By Glenda Roberson
I eat plants, real and fake.
Open door? A quick escape.
In the yard, I eat grass.
Back inside, I feel some gas.
Lift my leg to lick my toes.
Made a poot in this pose.
I don’t mind. I have no shame.
Maybe the dog will take the blame.
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My son would love this story. =) Good luck, Glenda.
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Thanks so much, Gregory!
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Very fun and clever!
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Thanks so much! It mak s me giggle.
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Really cute and funny!
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Thanks Danielle!
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Poor dog. Unfortunately, a true to life tale. Nice.
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Thanks, Maria!
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Hi Glenda…very entertaining…and quite true to form for many cats…lots of fun!
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Oh my gosh! My brothers would love this. (They are in their 50’s and 60’s. *rolls eyes.*
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Thank you! It is pretty stinking funny! 🙊
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50 words, Vivian Kirkfield March 4, 2019 Nancy Ferguson
RAINDROP 48 words
Raindrop falls,
Scared to drown.
“I don’t belong in a puddle.
Maybe I’ll wait and see.”
Round robin scoots in
twists and turns,
splashes and flaps,
shimmies and shakes Raindrop
from its wing.
“Now I fly, sparkle and shine.
I’m not scared. Yes, I belong in this puddle.”
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This is so sweet and with a clever premise.
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Sometimes things surprise us. Glad Raindrop figured out where to belong. Sweet story.
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Lots of strong verbs…I love that! And it’s a hero’s journey for raindrop…well done!
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This is lovely and lyrical. Love the unique main character. Nice job
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HONEY TREE TRUCE
By Jill Richards Proctor
49 Words
Slurping. Smacking.
Bear cub snacking.
Rushing. Raiding.
Ants invading.
Grumbling. Growling.
Bear cub scowling.
Bustling. Biting.
Ants exciting.
Whacking. Whomping.
Bear cub stomping.
Scooting. Scouting.
Ants rerouting.
Swiping. Swatting.
Bear cub plotting.
Dashing. Darting.
Ants outsmarting.
Flopping. Falling.
Bear cub Bawling.
Fussing. Fretting.
Ants regretting.
Coaxing. Caring.
Sticky sharing.
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Excellent word play and rhyme- nice job!
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Thank you!
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This is fantastic! I love the story and the rhyme.
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Thank you so much!
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Great story! The alliteration and the short sentences are fun to read.
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Love all the creative verb choices – they make the action in your story really stand out!
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Loving the rhythm and rhyme here. Very nice alliteration and imagery. Well done, Jill.
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Wonderful imagery & verb choices! So much fun to read aloud, Jill!
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Perfect title. Great rhythm, rhyme, and structure. You’ve captured the personalities and habits of these two species, as well an epic struggle for the honey that ends in a sticky friendship in such a concise manner. I could see this turned into a PB. Nicely done.
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Heart and humor combined with great verbs and lots of action…well done, Jill!
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Cute story written with lots of action and heart. Nice job.
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FROM SUN TO FROST
By Julie Augensen-Rand
48 words
What can sun be? [Art:Winter]
Spirit lifter.
Icicle dripper.
Shadow styler.
Snowman shrinker.
What can wind be? [Art: Spring]
Kite riser.
Seed scatterer.
Sailboat glider.
Dog dryer.
What can rain be? [Art: Summer]
Music maker.
Thirst quencher.
Flower feeder.
Puddle plopper.
What can frost be? [Art: Fall]
Air crisper.
Tree transformer.
Window crystalizer.
Breath taker.
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I think my favorite line is the last: Breath taker! Wow!
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This is really creative – love the imagery!
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This is lovely. Great potential to expand into a PB.
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Lovely imagery!
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Interesting imagery. I really liked “tree transformer,” “puddle plopper,” and “snowman shrinker.” All wrapped into a fun concept story. Nicely done.
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I absolutely LOVE your language, Julie…you’ve got wonderful imagery here. Nice job!
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Beautiful imagery in this concept story. LOve it!
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I was inspired by the Redwoods when I met them in California. Majestic creatures to be cherished.
Redwood Giant!
by Lily Erlic
Your trunk is like a red-necked dinosaur,
Stretch, stretch to touch the sky,
What does your canopy say?
Whispers to the clouds, no doubt,
Secrets in the sky,
Your droplets fall to my face,
Like liquid diamonds.
Redwood Giant,
Speak to me…
I can hear you say,
“Welcome!”
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I love this! Having visiting the Redwoods last year, this brought me back. What a beauteous sight they are to see! Thank you for invoking this memory!
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Hi Amanda,
Your welcome! I’m so happy for you for remembering the Redwoods. Once you meet them they stay with you forever. We are so fortunate that we both had the chance to see them.
All the best,
Lily
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I can see this being a picture book! Great images!
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I am honoured by your compliment. Thank you so much.
All the best to you!
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I was thinking the same thing! The imagery is beautiful. Great voice too!
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Thank you Danielle. I am grateful for the comment.
All the best to you!
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This is lovely, Lily. I love the red-necked dinosaur…very descriptive and visual.
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This is kind of you to say. Thank you for the comment. 🙂
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I love how you compare the trunk to the neck of a dinasaur – it gives an immediate sense of majesty & longevity.
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I’m in awe as you describe this poetically. Thank you for this lovely comment.
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The comparison of the redwoods and the “red-necked dinosaur” is both beautiful and poignant. The y do seem like ageless giants whispering secrets to the sky. A visit to sticks with you forever. Great job.
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Beautifully lyrical, Lily…this could easily be part of a book of nature poetry.
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Thank you Vivian for your encouragement. It means a lot to me. All the best, Lily
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Beautiful imagery and this also reminded me of a recent walk I did with Vivian through Redwoods on spring bridges when she was here in NZ. It was awesome.
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I can reply here, but I do not see where to post my story.
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