Strike up the band! Sharpen your pencils! It’s time to show the world that:
MAGIC HAPPENS WHEN YOU MAKE EVERY WORD COUNT

Today is the day, dear friends! Ready! Set! Go!
The #50PreciousWords 2019 Writing Contest is now OPEN!

For those of you who have not participated before, let me give you a bit of back story. March 2nd is the birthday of the incredible Theodore Geisel, better known as Dr. Seuss. For the last three years, I’ve hosted a little contest based on Bennet Cerf’s challenge to Seuss to write a children’s book using only 50 words. To answer that challenge, Seuss wrote Green Eggs and Ham. It’s true that the story has over 700 words…but only 50 unique words.
In 2016, I thought it would be fun to try to write a story for kids with ONLY 50 words. With a beginning, a middle, and an end. I wondered if I could do it. And then I opened the challenge to everyone. Much to my surprise and amazement, there were 128 entries! The next year, there were 253 entries. And last year, there were 298.
To backtrack a bit, in 2012 I had a dream. I wanted to write picture books. And I wanted to be traditionally published.
And one of the most important things I did was to participate in writing challenges like Susanna Hill’s contests.
Why was that important?
Because it got me writing. It got me revising. It got me submitting.
Hmmm….writing/revising/submitting. I believe that if we do those three things enough times, our writing improves and agents and editors get a chance to see our work. And as much as I am thrilled with my own success, nothing makes me happier than to hear about the success of others in our kidlit community.
So, please sharpen your pencils. Fire up your computers. And share your #50PreciousWords with us.
#50 PRECIOUS WORDS WRITING CHALLENGE GUIDELINES
- Write a story appropriate for kids ages 12 or under, using only 50 words…they can all be different words, or you can use some of them over and over…just as long as the total word count of the story is 50 or less.
- It can be prose, rhyme, free verse, silly or serious…whatever works for you.
- Title is not included in the word count.
- No illustration notes please.
- IMPORTANT: Post your story in the comment section below. If you have your own blog and want to post your story there also, please do. And let us know your post link. I ask for the link so that people will visit each other and find new friends in the kid lit community. But no matter how many other places you want to post your story, make sure at least one of those places is in the comment section of this blog post…and please make sure you put your name in the post because some of you have very creative emails/avatar names and I won’t know who you are. If you have any trouble at all posting the story, please email me and I will be happy to do it for you: viviankirkfield@gmail.com.
- Deadline for posting the story in the comments is Wednesday, March 6, at 11:59pm. And if you plan to ask me to post it for you, please send it at least the day before.
- As many of you know, I am in New Zealand right at this moment on a round the world trip of a life-time. I am hoping to announce the winners on March 16th, but I ask for your patience and understanding in case something comes up and it doesn’t happen that day. Also, although I will be posting the winners on March 16th, I won’t start awarding the prizes until after I return home, on April 8th. But believe me, these prizes will be worth the wait!
- When I do start contacting the winners, 1st place will choose whichever prize he/she wants. Then I will contact 2nd place with the remaining prizes to choose from. And so on down the line. And here, for your dining and dancing pleasure are the wonderful prizes.
- A critique from Storm Literary Agency partner Vicki Selvaggio who is one of the finest agents and loveliest people I know.

- A picture book or chapter book or MG critique with Clear Fork editor Callie Metler-Smith.

- A seat in Susanna Leonard Hill’s MAKING PICTURE BOOK MAGIC: This is the first picture book writing class I took in February 2014..it was a stellar foundation and it has served me well. Susanna is an amazing mentor and a seat in her class can be life-changing!

- A seat in Mira Reisberg’s Children’s Book Academy class on HUMOR – how to find it in your heart and how to write it into your picture books. I have not taken this class yet…but I know I should: https://childrensbookacademy.teachable.com/p/let-s-get-funny-writing-humor-for-kids1

- A complimentary viewing of Alayne Kaye Christan’s latest webinar: Top Ten Reason’s for Rejections.
If you want tips on some corrective action that you might take to improve your chances of submission success, and/or if you would like to deepen your understanding of plot and arc, this webinar is for you.

Alayne Kay Christian is the content and developmental editor for Blue Whale Press and an award-winning children’s book author. She is the creator and teacher of a picture book writing course, Art of Arc. She has been a professional picture book and chapter book critique writer since 2014. And worked as a critique ninja for Julie Hedlund’s 12 X 12 for three years. Alayne is a graduate of the Institute for Children’s Literature and she has spent the last eleven years studying under some of the top names in children’s literature.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Lindsay Metcalf
Photo courtesy: Anna Jackson Photography
Lindsay H. Metcalf is a children’s author, poet, reporter, and former editor for The Kansas City Star. She will debut with two nonfiction picture books in 2020. In the fall of that year, Charlesbridge will release Taking the Mic: Fourteen Young Americans Making History, a poetic anthology co-edited by Lindsay, Jeanette Bradley, and Keila V. Dawson, and illustrated by Bradley. It features fourteen contemporary young activists, each spotlighted by a well-known poet. Subjects include literacy activist Marley Dias, water protector Jasilyn Charger, Scout for Equality founder Zach Wahls, and immigration reformer Viridiana Sanchez Santos. Contributors include Nikki Grimes, Joseph Bruchac, Lesléa Newman, and Guadalupe García McCall. Details about Lindsay’s second nonfiction picture book will be forthcoming. To learn more about her books and paid critique services, please reach out on lindsayhmetcalf.com or on Twitter @lindsayhmetcalf.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Melissa Stoller.

Melissa Stoller is the author of the chapter book series The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection – Book One: Return to Coney Island and Book Two: The Liberty Bell Train Ride (Clear Fork Publishing, 2017 and 2019); and the picture books Scarlet’s Magic Paintbrush and Ready, Set, GOrilla! (Clear Fork, 2018). Upcoming releases include Return of the Magic Paintbrush and Sadie’s Shabbat Stories (Clear Fork, 2019). She is also the co-author of The Parent-Child Book Club: Connecting With Your Kids Through Reading (HorizonLine Publishing, 2009). Melissa is an Assistant and Blogger for the Children’s Book Academy, a Regional Ambassador for The Chapter Book Challenge, a Moderator for The Debut Picture Book Study Group, and a volunteer with the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators/MetroNY. Melissa has worked as a lawyer, legal writing instructor, freelance writer and editor, and early childhood educator. Additionally, she is a member of the Board of Trustees at The Hewitt School and at Temple Shaaray Tefila. Melissa lives in New York City with her husband, three daughters, and one puppy.
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- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Amber Hendricks.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Sherry Howard.

Sherry Howard lives in Middletown, Kentucky, in a household busy with kids and pets. She worked as an educator, and now has the luxury of writing full time. Her debut picture, Rock and Roll Woods, released in October, 2018. And her middle grade NF, Deep Sea Divers, just released. She has quite a few books in the pipeline for publication soon.
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Meet Kuda and Rock and Roll Woods here.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Julie Abery.

Mother. Writer. Teacher of the very young. I live in Switzerland with my partner and Tilly, the Springer Spaniel.
I ❤️ my job (it’s not every day you get to be an honorary five year old!)
I ❤️ chocolate (I live in Switzerland after all!)
I ❤️ walking the dog (well, I did eat all the chocolate!)
I ❤️ picture books!
If you would like to learn more about me, please visit
http://www.stormliteraryagency.com/our-authors-and-artists/
- Picture book critique from author Tina Cho.

Tina Cho is the author of four picture books– Rice from Heaven: The Secret Mission to Feed North Koreans (Little Bee Books/Bonnier Publishing August 2018), Korean Celebrations (forthcoming Tuttle 2019), Breakfast with Jesus (forthcoming Harvest House 2020), and a new sale yet to be announced. Although she grew up and taught in the United States, she currently lives in South Korea with her husband and two children while teaching at an international school.
- Picture book critique from author Carrie Finison.

Carrie Finison began her literary career at the age of seven with an idea, a box of markers, and her father’s typewriter. She has been writing off and on ever since, though she has (somewhat regretfully) traded in the typewriter for a laptop. Her poems and stories for children have appeared in Babybug, Ladybug, High Five, and Highlights magazines, and her debut picture book,DOZENS OF DOUGHNUTS, illustrated by Brianne Farley, will be published by Putnam in 2020. She lives outside Boston with her husband, son, daughter, and two cats who permit her to write in their cozy attic office. Find her online atwww.carriefinison.com or on Twitter @CarrieFinson.
- Picture book critique from Maria Marshall

Maria is a children’s author, blogger, and poet passionate about making nature fun for children. She was a round 2 judge for the 2018 & 2017 Cybils Awards. And a judge for the #50PreciousWords competition since its inception. Two of her poems are published in The Best Of Today’s Little Ditty 2016 and 2014-2015 anthologies. She is the parent of two amazing adults and lives in the Pacific Northwest with two Pixie Bob cats. When not writing, critiquing, or reading, she bird watches, travels the world, bakes, and hikes. The Picture Book Buzz
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- Signed copy of book by Laura Sassi

Laura Sassi has a passion for telling stories in prose and rhyme. Her picture books include GOODNIGHT, MANGER (Zonderkidz, 2015), GOODNIGHT, ARK (Zonderkidz, 2014), DIVA DELORES AND THE OPERA HOUSE MOUSE (Sterling, 2018) and LOVE IS KIND (Zonderkidz, 2018). She lives in New Jersey with her husband, two children, and a black Cockapoo named Sophie. She is represented by Lara Perkins of the Andrea Brown Literary Agency and you can learn more about her and her books at https://laurasassitales.wordpress.com/
- Signed copy of THE MASTERPIECE by Shelley Kinder

Shelley lives in Indiana with her family and loves writing for little people. Not So Scary Jerry (2017) was her first picture book. The Masterpiece (2018) is her second. Its original version got eleventh place in Vivian’s #50PreciousWords Contest in 2016
A big thank you to all of our amazing prize donors! Much appreciation to illustrator Vicky Fang whose awesome logo graces our challenge! And a grateful thank you to my dear friends and critique buddies, Maria Marshall, Julie Abery, and Diane Tulloch who will be helping me read and comment.
Last year there were almost 2000 comments – ALL OF THEM POSITIVE AND ENCOURAGING! I am so proud to be a part of this amazing kidlit community. Our news stations and politicians could definitely learn something from us.
And before I leave you to post your stories and comment on those you have a chance to read, I thought it would only be fair if I posted my sample of a 50-word story. I hang my head in shame because I am using the same story I wrote for last year’s post. I hope you will forgive me, preparations for my book launches and trip did not allow me time to write a new one, but I did want to put up an example for those who haven’t participated before. And maybe it will be new to them!
WHY THE STARS TWINKLE (49 words)
It was Sun’s birthday.
Moon gathered paper, paint,
glitter and glue to make a card.
But Wind blew.
Glitter and glue covered the stars.
“Now I have no gift for Sun,” cried Moon.
“Twinkling stars are the best present of all,” said Sun.
And Moon glowed all night long.
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Remember, if you have any questions or concerns, please email me at: viviankirkfield@gmail
I ask for your patience and understanding if I don’t get back to you right away…but please don’t stress…if you write a story and have trouble posting it, just email me. As long as your email gets to me time stamped before the contest closes, I will make sure your story is entered. Right at this moment, I am in Auckland, New Zealand, participating in library and school story times, reading FOUR OTTERS TOBOGGAN: AN ANIMAL COUNTING BOOK, PIPPA’S PASSOVER PLATE, and SWEET DREAMS, SARAH! How lucky can aa girl get???
And I am so looking forward to reading all of your precious words!
I’m thrilled to post my very first #50PreciousWords entry! Thank you for the creative push, Vivian.
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COLORFUL YOU (or, The Day the Play Dough Conformed)
By Savannah Rogers
(Word Count: 50)
Colors playing. Happy day.
“Too bright!” grumps Gray.
“Copy the accepted norm.”
Red joins Yellow. “We’ll conform!”
“Too bright!” tattles Tan.
Orange+Green: Brown’s a fan.
“TOO UNIQUE!” … Purple’s blue.
Squish… “We’re joining, too!”
“Just right,” Beige beams.
Monotone.
Completed dreams?
Enjoy uniqueness. Value hue.
Wonderful, colorful,
Just-right…
You.
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I posted at my fledgling blog, also. Please visit:
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Congrats on your first #50 words post!
Fun way to play with colors and show uniqueness. Just the right amount of alteration and good rhymes. Nicely done! Good luck.
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I love that you noticed the alliteration, thanks so much!
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That was gorgeous, Savannah, that KS for sharing 😍
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How kind! Thanks!
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Of course!😊
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Hurray for sharing your precious words with us, Savannah! Thank you for joining in the fun. I love the theme of acceptance and valuing uniqueness…and the rhyme and color words are lovely. Well done!
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😍 Thank YOU, Vivian, for the creative push!
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Love this unique concept. Combining colours kids will enjoy. Great job.
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THE BALLOON (50 words)
By: Aimee Isaac
One day at the fair,
the unthinkable happened.
It went up…
POP…
down…
and landed in a mountain stream.
It trickled down the mountain
into the river,
and rode the current
through the town,
along the bay,
into the ocean,
until the tide washed it ashore.
But,
who found it?
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You’re on a roll. Interesting way to explore the water cycle with a popped balloon. Glad no critter ate it. Fun.
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Nice, I love the ending, leaving it wide open😊
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Lovely images as we flow along with your phrases…through the town, along the bay, into the ocean…well done, Aimee!
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Love the journey we are taken on following the balloon down the river. Nice job.
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THE BOOK (50 words)
By: Aimee Isaac
The Book was her first and they went everywhere together:
Bedtime snuggles,
Picnics,
Car rides,
Family parties,
But eventually the Book landed on a shelf…
Watching,
Waiting,
Forgotten.
A very lonely time for a book that would rather be held.
Until one day it was rediscovered-
A first once again.
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Love this concept, Aimee!
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And another one! 🙂
This reminds me of “The Rocking Horse.” Awesome job of conveying a whole range of emotions and passage of time (3 words) in such a short story. Good luck.
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What a lovely sentiment. The book going everywhere together, then the shelf and then rediscovered. Nice job, Aimee.
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Nothing sadder than a book that is forgotten…so glad it was rediscovered, Aimee! So happy you joined in the #50PreciousWords fun. 🙂
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Love this. Love the concept and journey or in the life of… a book. Nice short punchy lines and very kid relatable. Nice job.
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Nice story. I could learn to love such a book.
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Sorry if this is a duplicate. I thought I posted it earlier but I don’t see it anywhere.
UP THE HILL
By Linda Staszak 44 words
(only 4 unique words!)
Pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal,
Pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal,
Pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal,
Pedal, pedal, pedal.
Pedal, pedal.
Pedal.
Wheeeeee!
Again!
Pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal,
Pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal,
Pedal, pedal, pedal, pedal,
Pedal, pedal, pedal.
Pedal, pedal.
Pedal.
Wheeeeee!
Done.
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Linda, This seems to be the only one. Glad you re-posted it.
Love the format, word picture poems or stories are so much fun. You definitely capture the work to get to the top and the excitement and fun of coasting done. Good luck.
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Thanks Maria!
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This is cute! I love the format! A story of 4 words! Amazing!
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Thanks for our kind words!
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oops–Your kind word!
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This made me smile! I can totally see a kid riding a bike saying this. The end just cracked me up
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Thanks, it was fun!
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I like the creative format! Only 4 words – wow!
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Trying to do something different–fun!
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No worries, Linda…I did see it a bit earlier…and commented there. Coasting downhill is definitely fun!
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The Princess and the Screen
By Dr. Anne Lipton
(50 words)
The princess had a sparkly phone,
a tablet, and TV.
She gamed upon the royal throne,
eyes glued to tapestry.
The princess lost her power,
devices, and high chair,
escaping her dark tower
for the farm-fresh air.
And once she had the world to play,
the princess won her HEA.
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Does HEA stand for Happily Ever After? I didn’t get it at first but I think that’s what you mean and, if so, I love the message of taking a break from devices to play outside sometimes. Nice job!
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Thanks! And yes, HEA is Happily Ever After.
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I agree with Mandy, if HEA = Happily Ever After, I like the message of “unplugging” and getting out into the world. (Says the person commenting on the post!). This is a fun story. 🙂
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Thanks, Maria!
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Love this different take on the princess genre of stories, Anne…and I’m so thrilled she got her Happily Ever After when she gave up her electronic gadgets! Well done!
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Thanks, Vivian, and thank you for all you do to support kidlit and other writers. You are a gem!
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I think parents are gonna love this more than the kids… lol. I love how it sends the message of getting out and enjoying fresh air instead of being cooped up inside all the time. Great job.
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OH, SAVVY (50 words)
by Danielle Hicks
Savvy’s puppy paws
squish-squash down the hall.
“Oh Savvy,” Mom sighs.
Savvy wags her muddy tail.
She scatters the trash…
steals the bacon…
shatters the teapot!
“Oh Savvy, you must go!” Mom yells.
But when Baby
toddles toward the street,
Savvy sounds the alarm.
“Oh Savvy,” Mom whispers. “Please stay.”
Thank you so much for hosting this competition, Vivian! I am always impressed by the generosity you show to the kidlit community.
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Sweet Savvy! I’m so glad she was able to prove her worth and save the day! ❤
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Me too! Thank you so much, Jolene!
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Yes, home forever now. A Savvy hero 🙂
Nice use of alliteration throughout. Makes the story sing.
best of luck to you, Danielle
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That’s a lovely compliment! Thank you, Vicki! Best of luck to you as well.
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Very visual. Savvy’s character really comes through.
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I was really hoping it would! Thank you so much, Martha!
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Thank goodness that baby had Savvy! 🙂
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Very true! Thank you, Mandy!
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Cute. What would a mum do without her Savvy. 😉 Nice job. Good luck.
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Haha, that’s so true! Thank you!
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I love Savvy’s spunk–especially stealing the bacon! A cute ending, Danielle!
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The bacon incident was inspired by my sister’s dog and all her real-life escapades, haha! Thank you, Aimee!
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Danielle, you have written a wonderful story!
I wish you all the best. 🙂
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Thank you so much, Lily!
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I loved it, Danielle. Just beautiful. ❤
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Thank you so much, CJ! That means a lot to me!
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So powerful and wonderful the things pets do for us. I just adore this
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Aw, that is so true! Thank you so much, Kaitlyn!
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You’re so welcome. I really enjoyed it, and I adore the name savvy because the irony at first and she really is savvy in the end, very nice touch 😊
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You are so kind, and I love that you caught that subtle nod with the name! I originally chose it because I was inspired by my sister’s trouble-making but lovable puppy (they call her Savvy, short for Savannah), but as I built the story, I realized it fit perfectly into the plot!
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That is SO perfect, meant to be, I’d say😉
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Heroes come in all sizes, even little, klutzy, trouble makers. I like the dog’s name, very unusual. You do a nice job of capturing her puppyness, a “dark moment of the soul,” and a satisfying ending in such few words. Good luck.
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I love your first sentence – it absolutely captures the heart of what I wanted to convey! Thank you so much for your kind feedback. I enjoyed the challenge of building a story arc in 50 words. The puppy’s name is actually inspired by my sister’s trouble-making but lovable dog (they call her Savvy, short for Savannah). As I was building my story, I realized how well the name fit into the plot – ironic in the beginning, accurate in the end!
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Oh my…good for Savvy…so happy the family learned to appreciate their loyal pet! I like the repetition and the message, Danielle…and I thank you for your kind words.
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It’s always so wonderful when an “underdog” comes to be appreciated! Thank you so much for your kind compliments!
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We all need a little Savvy in our lives. This was very cute. Great job Danielle.
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So true! Thank you for your kind words, Diane!
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THE SOUNDS OF FEET
by Penny McNally (50 words)
Walking to school, my boots crunch creakily creak on autumn’s dry leaves.
My sneakers scream and squawk in gym, going for the ball.
Snack time after school, my stocking feet silently skate and glide around the kitchen floor.
Swoosh swish say my slippers,
time for stories and bed.
Sweet dreams.
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Love all the feet sounds…and the story perspective. Nice job, Penny.
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Thank you!
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Fun onomatopoeia of a day seen through shoe sounds. I like “sneakers scream & squawk” – almost as bad as nails on chalk boards. Good luck.
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How clever, Penny…I’m thinking this could make a fun book, filled with shoe sounds/images. Well done!
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Great job Penny. Loved your unique character perspective and all the sounds of the shoes etc… All the best.
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Sir Bearington’s Wall
By Beth Mills
(47 words)
“Perfection!” declared old Sir Bearington, cementing the last brick.
His perfect flowerbeds were no longer threatened by stray balls, running feet, or any life at all.
Sir Bearington felt his garden’s orderly silence.
He fidgeted.
He frowned.
Sir Bearington took the first brick down.
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Love the message! Nice work!
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Thank you!
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Walls and fences don’t make such good neighbors, do they? 🙂 Well said in 47 words.
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Haha, they do not.
Thank you!
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Lovely sentiment. I am glad Sir Bearington allowed the world to share his garden after all. Love your ‘orderly silence’!
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I like how you made the threat to the garden balls & running feet. I can easily see a Bear, dealing with rabbits, squirrels, ….. Fun images and great message that actions can have unintended consequences – “orderly silence.” Great story.
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Sometimes orderliness isn’t all it is cracked up to be, right Beth? Glad Sir Bearington opted for companionship and life. Thanks so much for joining in the fun…well done!
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Great message in this one. Well done.
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I DIDN’T DO THAT!
by Carol Gordon Ekster
50 words
I didn’t do that!
Maybe Dog toppled it.
Or wind whipped it.
I didn’t do that!
Cat probably climbed on the counter.
Or Mouse zipped through.
I didn’t do that!
Maybe George stepped there.
Those gigantic footprints? – Not mine!
I didn’t do that!
That?
Oh, I did that!
I’m sorry.
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You got me smiling for I could see a kid saying this. It’s so typical of them. 🙂
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Super cute! Mr Nobody again…so childlike. Nice job, Carol.
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Love the repetition.
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This reminds me of the “Family Circus” ghost, NOT ME. I like that the ending comes with contrition and and apology, rather than another denial. This might be the start of a fun PB. Very fun.
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Love how the kid tries to pin it on anyone else. Great repetition…and a lovely ending, Carol…well done!
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Love it! So kid appropriate and fun. Lovely finish.
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MIRA MIRA WITH THE BALL
By: Mary Vander Plas (49 words)
Mira Mira
Kick the ball.
Shoot the ball.
Hit the ball.
You’re the fiercest girl of all.
Spike the ball.
Drive the ball.
Catch the ball.
See your name up on that wall.
Mira Mira
Work and dream and if you fall,
get up…don’t quit…you’re strong…that’s all!
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I really like how this is a twist on “Mirror Mirror on the wall,” flipping the spoiled fairytale queen into a fierce female athlete. Great work!
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Nice job, Mary. Great message.
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This is a fun twist on the fairy tale chant, really ingenious. You cover just about every sport that has a ball. Nicely done.
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Wonderful mightygirl story, Mary…with lots of picture book potential. Thanks for joining in the fun…well done!
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This is very clever. Love the repetition and message. Well done.
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EXPERIMENTAL HOMEWORK
by Serge Smagarinsky (50 words)
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Miss Cybil sent us home with “monster seeds”; but they wouldn’t work with water, light, nor heat.
Then I played them Monster Mash. Brutus howled along. And that’s when one seed grew… and grew… and growled.
Now, how do I explain to my parents, that my homework ate our hound?
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This is too funny! Great job, Serge!
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Thanks Midge, it was a lot of fun to write, too.
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Oh my goodness, I love that last line! Great job.
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Thanks Teresa, the last line (or a very similar version of it) was my starting point. A one-liner from an old Storystorm idea (or possibly even fromPiBoIdMo).
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Ahahaha! Great stuff.
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Thanks Kate. Glad you enjoyed it.
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I absolutely love that the seed growled. The ending is hilarious. Well done!
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Thanks Danielle. The story idea started with the ending. The growling seed came in during one of several revisions.
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This is very funny, Serge. Great twist at the end too.
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Thanks. This story idea started with the ending. It was fun working out how to get there.
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Love it, lol!
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Thanks CJ. I’m glad that it’s giving people a laugh.
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Oh my, I needed that laugh! Thank you. When the seed growled, I envisioned the plant from “Little Shop of Horrors.” I adore the twist on “the dog ate my homework.” Gotta love that Storystorm! 🙂
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Thanks Maria, and you thank you for the tip you sent me. It was great getting to meet you in person at SCBWIsyd, if only very briefly.
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So funny! I love the twist ending!
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Thanks, Jolene. Glad you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed playing with the idea.
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Oh my goodness, Serge! You are FUNNY! What a twist on the old ‘the dog ate my homework’…this reminds me of an old story by H.A. Rey, author of Curious George…he also wrote Elizabite: Adventures of a Carnivorous Plant…check it out if you can find it.
Well done! And it was so wonderful to get to meet you in person…I’m sorry we didn’t have more time to chat…but the conference time went so quickly. I’m loving NZ…but my three weeks are slipping away also…I am here for 10 more days and then on to Switzerland and then Bologna.
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Thanks for your kind words and book recommendation. And yes, was wonderful to meet you in person at SCBWIsyd. Enjoy the rest of your amazing world tour, and thanks again for running the #50PreciousWords challenge
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Oh my oh my! This was hilarious. Kids would love this. Love it Serge.
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Thanks Diane. We didn’t really get a chance to talk at SCBWIsyd but was lovely to meet you there.
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WHEN GRANDMA CALLS
By Midge Ballou Smith
50 words
Grandma visits me every day.
We play hide and seek, drink tea, and read stories.
Sometimes we go upstairs to see my latest artwork.
When it’s time for her to leave, we blow kisses, and say goodbye—LOTS of times.
Then,
I push the red button.
She disappears…
until tomorrow.
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Isn’t FaceTime fun? 🤓 Well done.
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Love this! It’s so relatable! My mom does this with all her long-distance grandbabies. Well done!
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This is great! What a fun angle. Nice job, Midge.
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I like your play on “calls” – because you set it up to be a “visit” and then twist it into a video call. Have you seen “Tea with Grandpa” by Barney Saltzberg (2014)? Might be a good mentor if you want to work this into a PB. Nice job.
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Nicely done! Very relatable to today’s kids, Midge…I Facetime with my granddaughter at least once a week. Thanks so much for joining in the fun!
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This is adorable. I thought at first Grandma was actually visiting in the flesh but then I realised. How very appropriate and kid friendly. Great job.
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Today Is A Good Day
Today is a good day.
We sit in the sun.
We sing and play.
We make sure the puppy has fun.
Today is a good day.
Tonight is a good night.
We whisper and giggle.
We sit by the moonlight.
We watch the puppy wiggle.
Tonight is a good night.
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I like how you repeat your structure for the day and night. Nice job.
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Fun parallel structure. I like how the puppy has a role both times. Nice story.
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Lots of great action for day and then quieter movement for night…well done, Mary.
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Fun read. Love the way we move from day to night with softer action. Nice job.
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FOUND
By Tami Traylor
50 words
Abandoned,
beneath brambles,
beside the empty house.
Seen only by
the occasional squirrel.
Red paint rusted,
lost years
before the sound
of sneakers
breaks the sleeping spell.
Before a breeze
reveals its hiding place.
“Look. What’s that?”
Skinny arms
untangle strangling vines.
“Let’s take it home,
fix it up.”
“Fine.”
Thanks for the opportunity, Vivian!
Tami
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Beautiful lyrical language, Tami. Lovely job!
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Thanks so much for the encouraging comment!
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Beautiful, Tami!
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Thank you! 🙂
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Beautifully lyrical story of a second chance for an old toy. Nicely done.
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Thanks for the kind words!
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Lovely use of words, Tami…I really enjoyed:
Red paint rusted,
lost years
before the sound
of sneakers
breaks the sleeping spell.
Before a breeze
reveals its hiding place.
What a wonderful visual you provided for us! Well done.
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Thank you so much, Vivian! I’m an illustrator working on improving my writing skills. I appreciate the opportunity to participate in this challenge.
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Love that we don’t know exactly what It is. Beautiful writing.
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“Magique Comes Home”
Smoke rises.
Ash falls.
Sirens wail.
Animals run: up trees,
into ponds, under culverts.
Whew — safe.
Hide. Wait.
Then, cautious steps.
Fearful sniffs.
Come home? Only ruins.
Wait. Hunger. Hunt. Wonder.
Sniff. TUNA?! Come running!
Gulp, gulp, caught.
Hello, old friend! Purr.
Car ride.
New home.
Warm lap.
Welcome back!
– Thanks for the opportunity, Vivian! This challenge is TOUGH, but fun.
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What an emotional journey in those 50 words! Love!
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You packed so much tension into so few words! I was relieved the cat found his family again. Well done!
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Well done!
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I felt like I was there with Magique and invested in the journey. Well done!
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Wow Teresa! Lovely lyrical language and emotion. I am glad cat found a warm lap after the trauma.
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Great job, Teresa! You took us on an emotional journey in 50 words.
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Great pacing and packed with emotion. So glad this story had a happy ending. Too many pets ended up in shelters & never reunited after recent fires. You might think about tweaking this into a PB, there are so many images swirling around these few words. Nicely done.
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Lovely punchy phrasing takes us on an emotional journey for the cat…I think you have something here that kids can relate to…especially those who have lost homes and possessions because of fires. Well done, Teresa!
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This little story reminded me of the Earthquake Cat. Such a beautiful emotional story. So glad he found a home.
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TORTILLAS FOR TWO
by Jolene Gutiérrez
40 words
The men took Papi back to Mexico, so
Mamá makes tortillas for two, not three.
I wait by the window,
watching, wondering:
Will Papi come home?
And if Mamá gets taken, will I be alone?
Solamente uno,
tortillas for one.
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Lots of emotion packed into your 40 words. Good job!
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Thank you so much, Mandy! 🙂
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You just broke my heart! Such an important story right now, though.
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Thank you so much, Teresa. ❤
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So touching, yet important and timely. Beautiful job!
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Thank you so much, Susie! ❤
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Heartbreaking. You made me care about your character in only 40 words. Beautiful work!
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Thank you so much, Danielle. ❤
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from the mouth of a babe…penned by a poet.
Lovely and haunting.
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Thank you so much, Willow. ❤
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This is so well written with emotion with just 50 words!
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I just looked again it’s 40 words! Bravo!
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Thank you so much, Lisa! ❤
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Wow, Jolene. An emotionally charged 40 words indeed. Very well done.
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Thank you so much, Julie! I love your Book Babies–that would be the perfect way to start a public library storytime for babies and caregivers. ❤
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Thank you, Jolene. 🙂
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Timely and a touching story–well done, Jolene!
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Thank you so much, Aimee! ❤
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Beautiful, heartbreaking, honest. Great job!
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Thank you so, so much! ❤
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Oh this touched my heart. Touched my heart.
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Thank you so much, Pamela! ❤
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Heartbreaking. You elicit sympathy for, and anger on behalf of, your MC in 40 words. Unfortunately true and timely. Well done.
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Thank you so much, Maria. One of the beauties of reading is the ability to walk in others’ shoes, and it makes my heart happy that my little story might allow others to do that. ❤
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Magic happens when you make every word count…I dub thee a magician, Jolene. I hope you move forward with this story…it is worthy of being a book…and is much needed!
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Oh, Vivian, thank you! I’m honored. Your words mean so much to me. ❤
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Love this. Packed with emotion in such few words. Great job.
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Thank you so much for reading and for your kind comments, Diane!
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RUNAWAY MOOSE (50 words)
Oh, no! Moose ran away!
Have you seen Moose?
Is Moose in here? No!
Have you seen Moose? Moose is big and brown.
Is Moose in here? No!
Where, oh where is Moose?
Look! Look! Here is Moose.
Come here, Moose.
Good dog, Moose! Good dog!
I love you Moose.
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Thanks for hosting this, Vivian!
-Kimberly
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Well you had me fooled! Moose is a dog! Ha ha.. nice job!
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Nice job carrying the joke/secret through to the end. And pulling it off in 50 words. Kudos.
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Fun reveal at the end, Kimberly…so happy Moose has a loving home. Thanks for joining in with such a sweet story. 😉
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Love this. Gosh so Moose is a dog. Very clever story with a twist at the end.
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TREASURE
by Mandy Yokim (https://www.mandyyokim.com/2019-50preciouswords/)
50 words
“What’s in the box, Mom?”
“Broken dinner plates going to the trash.”
But I see potential.
My big sister helps me carefully smash the plates into tiny pieces.
We arrange a mosaic,
glue the pieces together,
add grout,
then frame our creation.
It reminds us:
broken can still be beautiful.
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Beautiful! Such a powerful lesson (and craft idea) in only 50 words.
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Thank you, Jolene!
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Such an eco friendly story. Turing garbage into art is wonderful, and this has a lovely underlying message.
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Thank you, Stephanie!
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I love how your MC sees potential where others see only trash. Beautiful message throughout. Well done!
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Thanks, Danielle! Happy to be Twitter pals now, too. 🙂
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Likewise!
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The storyline mirrors the DIY project so well, all the parts brought together with a gorgeous and reflective last line.
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That last line is my favorite, too. Good reminder for all of us who don’t always feel useful or beautiful because of this flaw or that. Thank you for reading. I’ll make sure to read yours, too.
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Absolutely! Broken can be beautiful. Great message about recycling what we all too quickly throw out. Nice job, Mandy.
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Thank you very much for reading! I love that it was the kid who saw the potential, right? I’m trying to keep up with everyone’s story and I’ll make sure to read yours. 🙂
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Hi – I just tried to do a search of the page for your story, litteredstoryshed. I see all your supportive, lovely comments on other stories but not yours. Do you have a story in the competition? I’d love to read it. 🙂
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There is a link to my blog somewhere in the stories,
littleredstoryshed.wordpress.com 🙂
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I found it with that link – and went to your website. Book Babies – I love it! Takes me back to when my kids were little enough to read with me on my lap. Ah, the memories. Great job evoking those precious moments!
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Thanks, Mandy. 🙂
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I love the sentiment that broken can still be beautiful. My daughter is always finding treasure from trash. Kids will be able to relate to this piece. Well done, Mandy!
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Wow. One line, five words – “broken can still be beautiful” makes this resonate with those who see a DIY project and those who are themselves broken. A very poignant reminder that “beauty (or potential) is in the eye of the beholder” and that reusing (re-purposing) is important. Great job!
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What a beautiful message, Mandy. I love that the broken pottery creates some new…and your last line is fabulous!
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I love the theme of recycling and that you can create something beautiful from something broken. Great job.
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