Strike up the band! Sharpen your pencils! It’s time to show the world that:
MAGIC HAPPENS WHEN YOU MAKE EVERY WORD COUNT

Today is the day, dear friends! Ready! Set! Go!
The #50PreciousWords 2019 Writing Contest is now OPEN!

For those of you who have not participated before, let me give you a bit of back story. March 2nd is the birthday of the incredible Theodore Geisel, better known as Dr. Seuss. For the last three years, I’ve hosted a little contest based on Bennet Cerf’s challenge to Seuss to write a children’s book using only 50 words. To answer that challenge, Seuss wrote Green Eggs and Ham. It’s true that the story has over 700 words…but only 50 unique words.
In 2016, I thought it would be fun to try to write a story for kids with ONLY 50 words. With a beginning, a middle, and an end. I wondered if I could do it. And then I opened the challenge to everyone. Much to my surprise and amazement, there were 128 entries! The next year, there were 253 entries. And last year, there were 298.
To backtrack a bit, in 2012 I had a dream. I wanted to write picture books. And I wanted to be traditionally published.
And one of the most important things I did was to participate in writing challenges like Susanna Hill’s contests.
Why was that important?
Because it got me writing. It got me revising. It got me submitting.
Hmmm….writing/revising/submitting. I believe that if we do those three things enough times, our writing improves and agents and editors get a chance to see our work. And as much as I am thrilled with my own success, nothing makes me happier than to hear about the success of others in our kidlit community.
So, please sharpen your pencils. Fire up your computers. And share your #50PreciousWords with us.
#50 PRECIOUS WORDS WRITING CHALLENGE GUIDELINES
- Write a story appropriate for kids ages 12 or under, using only 50 words…they can all be different words, or you can use some of them over and over…just as long as the total word count of the story is 50 or less.
- It can be prose, rhyme, free verse, silly or serious…whatever works for you.
- Title is not included in the word count.
- No illustration notes please.
- IMPORTANT: Post your story in the comment section below. If you have your own blog and want to post your story there also, please do. And let us know your post link. I ask for the link so that people will visit each other and find new friends in the kid lit community. But no matter how many other places you want to post your story, make sure at least one of those places is in the comment section of this blog post…and please make sure you put your name in the post because some of you have very creative emails/avatar names and I won’t know who you are. If you have any trouble at all posting the story, please email me and I will be happy to do it for you: viviankirkfield@gmail.com.
- Deadline for posting the story in the comments is Wednesday, March 6, at 11:59pm. And if you plan to ask me to post it for you, please send it at least the day before.
- As many of you know, I am in New Zealand right at this moment on a round the world trip of a life-time. I am hoping to announce the winners on March 16th, but I ask for your patience and understanding in case something comes up and it doesn’t happen that day. Also, although I will be posting the winners on March 16th, I won’t start awarding the prizes until after I return home, on April 8th. But believe me, these prizes will be worth the wait!
- When I do start contacting the winners, 1st place will choose whichever prize he/she wants. Then I will contact 2nd place with the remaining prizes to choose from. And so on down the line. And here, for your dining and dancing pleasure are the wonderful prizes.
- A critique from Storm Literary Agency partner Vicki Selvaggio who is one of the finest agents and loveliest people I know.

- A picture book or chapter book or MG critique with Clear Fork editor Callie Metler-Smith.

- A seat in Susanna Leonard Hill’s MAKING PICTURE BOOK MAGIC: This is the first picture book writing class I took in February 2014..it was a stellar foundation and it has served me well. Susanna is an amazing mentor and a seat in her class can be life-changing!

- A seat in Mira Reisberg’s Children’s Book Academy class on HUMOR – how to find it in your heart and how to write it into your picture books. I have not taken this class yet…but I know I should: https://childrensbookacademy.teachable.com/p/let-s-get-funny-writing-humor-for-kids1

- A complimentary viewing of Alayne Kaye Christan’s latest webinar: Top Ten Reason’s for Rejections.
If you want tips on some corrective action that you might take to improve your chances of submission success, and/or if you would like to deepen your understanding of plot and arc, this webinar is for you.

Alayne Kay Christian is the content and developmental editor for Blue Whale Press and an award-winning children’s book author. She is the creator and teacher of a picture book writing course, Art of Arc. She has been a professional picture book and chapter book critique writer since 2014. And worked as a critique ninja for Julie Hedlund’s 12 X 12 for three years. Alayne is a graduate of the Institute for Children’s Literature and she has spent the last eleven years studying under some of the top names in children’s literature.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Lindsay Metcalf
Photo courtesy: Anna Jackson Photography
Lindsay H. Metcalf is a children’s author, poet, reporter, and former editor for The Kansas City Star. She will debut with two nonfiction picture books in 2020. In the fall of that year, Charlesbridge will release Taking the Mic: Fourteen Young Americans Making History, a poetic anthology co-edited by Lindsay, Jeanette Bradley, and Keila V. Dawson, and illustrated by Bradley. It features fourteen contemporary young activists, each spotlighted by a well-known poet. Subjects include literacy activist Marley Dias, water protector Jasilyn Charger, Scout for Equality founder Zach Wahls, and immigration reformer Viridiana Sanchez Santos. Contributors include Nikki Grimes, Joseph Bruchac, Lesléa Newman, and Guadalupe García McCall. Details about Lindsay’s second nonfiction picture book will be forthcoming. To learn more about her books and paid critique services, please reach out on lindsayhmetcalf.com or on Twitter @lindsayhmetcalf.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Melissa Stoller.

Melissa Stoller is the author of the chapter book series The Enchanted Snow Globe Collection – Book One: Return to Coney Island and Book Two: The Liberty Bell Train Ride (Clear Fork Publishing, 2017 and 2019); and the picture books Scarlet’s Magic Paintbrush and Ready, Set, GOrilla! (Clear Fork, 2018). Upcoming releases include Return of the Magic Paintbrush and Sadie’s Shabbat Stories (Clear Fork, 2019). She is also the co-author of The Parent-Child Book Club: Connecting With Your Kids Through Reading (HorizonLine Publishing, 2009). Melissa is an Assistant and Blogger for the Children’s Book Academy, a Regional Ambassador for The Chapter Book Challenge, a Moderator for The Debut Picture Book Study Group, and a volunteer with the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators/MetroNY. Melissa has worked as a lawyer, legal writing instructor, freelance writer and editor, and early childhood educator. Additionally, she is a member of the Board of Trustees at The Hewitt School and at Temple Shaaray Tefila. Melissa lives in New York City with her husband, three daughters, and one puppy.
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- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Amber Hendricks.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Sherry Howard.

Sherry Howard lives in Middletown, Kentucky, in a household busy with kids and pets. She worked as an educator, and now has the luxury of writing full time. Her debut picture, Rock and Roll Woods, released in October, 2018. And her middle grade NF, Deep Sea Divers, just released. She has quite a few books in the pipeline for publication soon.
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Meet Kuda and Rock and Roll Woods here.
- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Julie Abery.

Mother. Writer. Teacher of the very young. I live in Switzerland with my partner and Tilly, the Springer Spaniel.
I ❤️ my job (it’s not every day you get to be an honorary five year old!)
I ❤️ chocolate (I live in Switzerland after all!)
I ❤️ walking the dog (well, I did eat all the chocolate!)
I ❤️ picture books!
If you would like to learn more about me, please visit
http://www.stormliteraryagency.com/our-authors-and-artists/
- Picture book critique from author Tina Cho.

Tina Cho is the author of four picture books– Rice from Heaven: The Secret Mission to Feed North Koreans (Little Bee Books/Bonnier Publishing August 2018), Korean Celebrations (forthcoming Tuttle 2019), Breakfast with Jesus (forthcoming Harvest House 2020), and a new sale yet to be announced. Although she grew up and taught in the United States, she currently lives in South Korea with her husband and two children while teaching at an international school.
- Picture book critique from author Carrie Finison.

Carrie Finison began her literary career at the age of seven with an idea, a box of markers, and her father’s typewriter. She has been writing off and on ever since, though she has (somewhat regretfully) traded in the typewriter for a laptop. Her poems and stories for children have appeared in Babybug, Ladybug, High Five, and Highlights magazines, and her debut picture book,DOZENS OF DOUGHNUTS, illustrated by Brianne Farley, will be published by Putnam in 2020. She lives outside Boston with her husband, son, daughter, and two cats who permit her to write in their cozy attic office. Find her online atwww.carriefinison.com or on Twitter @CarrieFinson.
- Picture book critique from Maria Marshall

Maria is a children’s author, blogger, and poet passionate about making nature fun for children. She was a round 2 judge for the 2018 & 2017 Cybils Awards. And a judge for the #50PreciousWords competition since its inception. Two of her poems are published in The Best Of Today’s Little Ditty 2016 and 2014-2015 anthologies. She is the parent of two amazing adults and lives in the Pacific Northwest with two Pixie Bob cats. When not writing, critiquing, or reading, she bird watches, travels the world, bakes, and hikes. The Picture Book Buzz
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- Signed copy of book by Laura Sassi

Laura Sassi has a passion for telling stories in prose and rhyme. Her picture books include GOODNIGHT, MANGER (Zonderkidz, 2015), GOODNIGHT, ARK (Zonderkidz, 2014), DIVA DELORES AND THE OPERA HOUSE MOUSE (Sterling, 2018) and LOVE IS KIND (Zonderkidz, 2018). She lives in New Jersey with her husband, two children, and a black Cockapoo named Sophie. She is represented by Lara Perkins of the Andrea Brown Literary Agency and you can learn more about her and her books at https://laurasassitales.wordpress.com/
- Signed copy of THE MASTERPIECE by Shelley Kinder

Shelley lives in Indiana with her family and loves writing for little people. Not So Scary Jerry (2017) was her first picture book. The Masterpiece (2018) is her second. Its original version got eleventh place in Vivian’s #50PreciousWords Contest in 2016
A big thank you to all of our amazing prize donors! Much appreciation to illustrator Vicky Fang whose awesome logo graces our challenge! And a grateful thank you to my dear friends and critique buddies, Maria Marshall, Julie Abery, and Diane Tulloch who will be helping me read and comment.
Last year there were almost 2000 comments – ALL OF THEM POSITIVE AND ENCOURAGING! I am so proud to be a part of this amazing kidlit community. Our news stations and politicians could definitely learn something from us.
And before I leave you to post your stories and comment on those you have a chance to read, I thought it would only be fair if I posted my sample of a 50-word story. I hang my head in shame because I am using the same story I wrote for last year’s post. I hope you will forgive me, preparations for my book launches and trip did not allow me time to write a new one, but I did want to put up an example for those who haven’t participated before. And maybe it will be new to them!
WHY THE STARS TWINKLE (49 words)
It was Sun’s birthday.
Moon gathered paper, paint,
glitter and glue to make a card.
But Wind blew.
Glitter and glue covered the stars.
“Now I have no gift for Sun,” cried Moon.
“Twinkling stars are the best present of all,” said Sun.
And Moon glowed all night long.
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Remember, if you have any questions or concerns, please email me at: viviankirkfield@gmail
I ask for your patience and understanding if I don’t get back to you right away…but please don’t stress…if you write a story and have trouble posting it, just email me. As long as your email gets to me time stamped before the contest closes, I will make sure your story is entered. Right at this moment, I am in Auckland, New Zealand, participating in library and school story times, reading FOUR OTTERS TOBOGGAN: AN ANIMAL COUNTING BOOK, PIPPA’S PASSOVER PLATE, and SWEET DREAMS, SARAH! How lucky can aa girl get???
And I am so looking forward to reading all of your precious words!
Me and Bear (38 words)
By Jyoti Rajan Gopal
I wake up
Grumpy
Crabby
Angry
Cross
I burrow under my covers.
Bear snuggles with me.
I hug Bear
Cuddly
Fuzzy
Velvety
Soft
Bear hugs me back.
I love Bear
And Bear loves
Grumpy
Crabby
Angry
Cross
Me.
I was so nervous about doing this but it was so much fun! Really enjoying reading all the amazing creative stories.
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This would be so reassuring for a child to read. Well done!
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Thank you!
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Beautiful! I think you have done an amazing job! I love that Bear is always there, whatever his mood. Unconditional love. Well done, Jyoti.
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Ohhhhh, this is so good. Love it.
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You captured the best thing about a friend – always there no matter our mood. Great job. I’m glad you participated.
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Hurray for your first time participating! I love your message of being loved no matter who or what or how we are…I’ve always said that it is the least ‘lovable’ child who actually needs the most love. And I love your careful use of words and repetition…well done, Jyoti.
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Very clever and beautifully done. A message of unconditional love. well done.
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SSSORRY!
I had a friend; his name was Jake.
When Jake left me to play with Blake
I called my friend a rattlesnake.
That night I had a stomachache.
I wrote this note by morning break:
“Dear Jake, I made a big mistake.”
I now have friends named Jake and Blake.
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I love the gambit of emotions your MC goes through! Well done for only 50 words.
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Thank you!
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You have really captured so much in so few words here, Colleen. Well done.
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Thank you!!
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Nice job capturing the hardships of early friendships in so few words. Even got the title to play along. Nice job.
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Thank you!!
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Hats off, Colleen…not only did you capture the emotions of your mc, but you also managed to create a clever rhyming story…well done!
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Thank your for this challenge Vivian! And I hope you are having or had a great trip!
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You are so welcome, Colleen! And I’m having a fabulous time!
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Oh dear, hope all is well now. Great job in only 50 words.
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“No Matter What Happens” by Katie Helgason
Be an astronaut
Soar through the stars
Be a mechanic
Fix all the cars
Be pretty, be smart
Live near, live far
Be a girl, be a boy
Be whoever you are
Write books, play games
Play sports or act
No matter what happens
I will love you, that’s fact
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Wonderful snappy rhyme! And such an inspiring message.
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I love this and your rhymes are brilliant :o)
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Beautiful message!
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Beautiful message with great rhythm and rhyme. Lovely job, Katie.
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Great message for kids (all of us actually). I like that you chose an astronaut and a mechanic as the professions. Nicely done.
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Great message of acceptance and inclusivity, Katie…well done!
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Great visuals in short snappy sentences. Great job.
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THE COUGH (50 words)
Oh, I have a cough,
It’s loud and deep.
It frightens the cat,
It makes mother weep.
“Hmm,” said the doctor
As he looked in my nose,
Then thumped my knee
To move my toes.
“Sure as Swiss cheese
Has those tiny holes,
You’ve got some fluid
In your bronchioles!”
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Oh, gosh, I wish my kids were still little so I could repeat the last stanza to them if they were sick, lol! So fun!
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Thank you, Jolene! ❤
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Oh, love this!! My nurse self is super impressed with your marriage of rhyme and anatomy… long distance high five!
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Thanks a lot, Jen ❤
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And Jen – I am a nurse too! High five!
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Wait, did I know that?!? Surely I would’ve remembered… nurse/picture book writers are a rare breed!!
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Not sure if we ever shared that. I’m an RN and worked primarily in geriatric home health with a stint in endoscopy. I worked in an assisted living facility when I was an LPN, and to be honest it was my favorite job! ❤ I stay home with my soon-to-be-4-year-old now.
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We are cut from such a similar mold! The geriatric population is my FAVORITE… For the past 7 years I’ve worked for a hospice company. I used to sit and have coffee with the most precious elderly people before moving into my current role (auditing charts.) One day when, we finally meet in person we’ll have so much to talk about!
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I love those last two lines!
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Thank you, Danielle! 🙂
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Very clever with your story and your rhyme! Well done!
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Thank you so much, Colleen!
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This is so funny. Kudos for rhyming bronchioles! Love that the doctor diagnoses this from the nose & the toes. 🙂 Good job.
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Thanks so much Maria!
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You definitely made me smile! And yes, I wish my kids were young so I could read this to them. Lots of fun, Stephanie…I will always think of you when I get a cough. 🙂
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Thanks, Vivian! Always lots of fun to participate 🙂
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Love this. Very cleverly written. Well done.
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LUCAS DOESN’T LIKE ART
by Robin Brett Wechsler
(word count: 50)
“What’s that?” asked Kalani.
Lucas frowned. “It’s nothing.”
He scribbled and smudged his picture. “I don’t like art!”
“Mr. Marshall says it brings people together,” said Kalani.
Lucas fiddled with clay instead. But oops! It fell.
Lucas picked it up. He examined it from different angles.
Lucas grinned. “It’s perfect!”
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Nice job Robin! He found his medium.
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Always sad when a kid says they don’t like art. Glad he found something he liked. Nice job.
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I’m so glad Lucas found a way to express his artistic creativity – best of all, he was happy with it. That is so important for kids because they often compare their work to others or what they see in a book…and theirs seems to be not as good. But we want kids to know that whatever they create, it has value. 😉 Well done, Robin!
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Thanks, Vivian! And to all who liked my story. There are so many good ones here!
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Each to their own. Nice job.
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Ryan’s Rainbow
(word count 49)
I’m different.
Not on the outside,
but inside.
I’m a RAINBOW!
Being a rainbow
takes A LOT of courage.
One thing’s for sure.
WE ARE BEAUTIFUL!
Mom says it’s OK!
Dad-TOO!
Grandma says, rainbows are a gift.
The best thing is…
Rainbows aren’t just for me.
They’re for EVERYONE!
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This has such a beautiful message. Great job!
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Love it! I didn’t see this before I wrote my rainbow story. Rainbows are good stuff 🙂
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Beautifully poignant. What a strong, self-assured young kid. Great job in getting these emotions and message through in less than 50 words. Good luck.
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I love your short punchy sentences, Andrew…they work well with this story. And your message is wonderful!
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This is beautiful Andrew. Love the message it conveys.
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Bomba Burrito by Jenny Buchet
(50w)
Maxie loves massive, expansive burritos.
Cheese. Salsa. Chicken and guac.
Rice, beans, lettuce on top.
She hefts it to her lips….
BOMBA!
Burrito overload! Salsa overflow!
Scoop it up. Clamp it shut.
Take that bite…
BOMBA BOOM!
Burrito implosion! Cheesy erosion.
Maxie’s masterpiece is scrapped.
Hmmm…
Maxie loves nacho mountains!
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I love this! Your use of occasional rhyme is delightful. And who hasn’t had a burrito explosion.
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Only every time I eat one, LOL! Not that this is based on me….. 😉
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This made me hungry! I enjoyed the fun word choices like “bomba” and “burrito implosion.” Really cute!
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So did you eat a burrito later? 😉 After uploading this, I decided to err on the side of caution & dined on mac n cheese 😉
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Haha I didn’t – but I might tonight!
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So fun! I can picture the illustrations on this one AND I’m now craving a burrito. . .or nachos. 😉
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Awesome! It originally started as a counting PB story but I can’t do that within 50w 🙂
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I can relate to this! Funny!
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Based on a true story 😉 !
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Ha! This made me giggle. Some great language here. Well done.
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Thank you!
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I love “burrito implosion” and “cheesy erosion.” Great descriptions and action to an all too common problem. Lots of fun. Good luck.
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Ahh, thanks Maria! Personally I hate seeing cheese go to waste 😉
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Now I am hungry! I love the punch of the ingredient list…and the occasional rhyme works. Nice job, Jenny!
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Thanks Vivian! 🙂
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Anything with a cheesy salsa explosion has got my vote. yum!
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Haha, thx Diane!
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Joe the Writer
“I’m writing a book,” says Joe.
A tale of a magical time.
A faraway land of make-believe.
Written in the style of rhyme.
A castle with an unhappy dragon
A fire-tear falling from his eye.
“Gorgan, NO! You’re burning my book!
If you stop, I will teach you to fly”
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Nice rhythm and rhyme. Write on Joe and RJ. best of luck to you 🙂
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Interesting. I would love to see images with this one. Is the dragon in the story or is Joe sharing the story with the dragon? Hope Joe can cheer the dragon. Good luck.
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Very clever rhyme, RJ…and the twist at the end is lots of fun. I want to find out more about Joe and his dragon. 😉
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Very interesting premise. Love the rhyming. Great setting. Nice job.
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A Fork Full of Broccoli
by Florbela Nienaber
(Word Count: 50)
Broccoli will make you strong!
Can I lift an elephant?
No.
Then I’ll have Ice cream instead. It’s full of calcium.
It will make you healthy!
Will my fever break after I eat it?
No.
Then I’ll have chocolate instead. It’s full of “Auntie-oxants”.
Broccoli it is, little man.
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Clever fellow. I like him 🙂
Cute story. best of luck, Florbela
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Thank you Willow!
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This is super cute! And so child like! They are pros at negotiation 😉 I love “auntie-oxants” Nice job.
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Oh those little negotiators. Love the “Auntie-oxants.” So many funny stories come from “mishearing.” Hope he gets something sweet after he eats his broccoli. 🙂
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Lots of humor here, Florbela…I’ll have the ice cream and chocolate also. 😉
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Ha this is very cute. I can visualize this. Nice job.
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The Thanksgiving Cat Burglar by Stephanie Gibeault
(50 words)
Clawdio’s whiskers twitch.
Aromas of turkey, stuffing, and candied yams.
A silent leap onto the kitchen table.
Slink past the mashed potatoes, curve around the gravy boat. The golden bird glistens on its platter.
Nope, he spies a tastier morsel.
Plunging into the wooden bowl, he emerges with lettuce.
Victory!
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This was a surprise! A cat who goes for the lettuce over all that other stuff. Cute, Stephanie!
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Thanks so much. This was based on my cat who surprises me all the time.
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Really cute title, and I enjoyed the unexpected ending!
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Thank you! I appreciate the kind words.
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Yeah! a veggie cat 🙂
Nice! best of luck, Stephanie.
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He’s an eat everything cat! But veggies are a special favourite. Thank you for your support.
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This is cute with a twist! Good fun, Stephanie. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked the twist.
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I love the sensory details here. And a cat who loves lettuce? That appeals to this vegetarian’s heart!
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Thank you. He loves red pepper too!
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Ha! That is great, Stephanie! I did not see that coming at all. I love “slink past the mashed potatoes, curve around the gravy boat.” Fantastic. Yay for cats who love veggies, lol!
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I’m so glad it took you by surprise! Thanks for your kind words.
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I love this cat! Great job building the scene (awesome images) and the suspense. I was totally caught up and wondering what else would be on the table. [My cat would have snagged the pumpkin pie.] Impressed you did this in so few words. Good luck.
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You’ve got some wonderful phrasing and action here, Stephanie…slink past the mashed potatoes, plunging into the wooden bowl…well done!
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Wow! This cat really caught me by surprise. Lovely writing – slink past the mashed potatoes – great story with a twist. Nice job.
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Tooth Trouble
Everyone had an idea for his wiggly tooth,
But Pat only did things when he was ready.
“Eat an apple!”
“No thanks.”
“String and a doorknob!”
“Not yet!”
“Let me give it a tug!”
“No way!”
One day, at lunch, he knew it was time.
Deep breath.
PULL.
Success!
I love #50PreciousWords and I’m so happy enter (with my first non-fiction story!!)
Feel free to check out my blog to learn more about the boy and the story, behind the story…
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Good for Pat! I am glad that he was able to deal with the tooth trouble in his own time!
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You and me both! Thanks for taking the time to read it 🙂
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Those are all the classic tooth pulling tricks! I love that Pat decided to take charge and do his own thing.
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Yes, he was so proud! One day my husband actually had a string around his tooth, and the other end on his brothers scooter before Pat got cold feet… 😳 I wasn’t sure how to describe that scene in less than 50 words though. Lol.
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Oh my…the same thing happened to my grandson at a wedding. His extremely loose tooth was really bothering him and he wouldn’t let anyone near him…but my daughter in law was able to help and saved the day. 🙂
Nice punchy sentences give us some drama and pacing.
And so glad you love #50PreciousWords, Jennifer!
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I like that Pat did things his way. Sometimes, you just know when it’s right.
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I like this. If I’m gonna endure pain I prefer that I’m the one going to cause it. A lot of kids will relate. Nice job.
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Rainbow’s End by Kate Allen Fox (50 words)
Rainbow groaned.
One moment, one place.
Then, zap! Somewhere new…
Wherever someone wished for light in the rain.
“No more!” she cried.
Over the ocean, she lay down.
In her sleep, wishes called to her.
Her arches stretched until…
She encircled the earth.
She awoke a Rainbow with no end.
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This is a beautiful story, Kate! I really love the line “Wherever someone wished for light in the rain.” Lovely imagery throughout!
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Thanks so much, Danielle!
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Lovely lyricism, stellar STEM touches, and awesome twist “no”-ending. Way to circle the story!
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Wow, thank you so much!
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Lovely lyrical language Kate. Well done.
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Thank you!
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Beautifully lyrical. I really enjoyed a “light in the rain” and “a Rainbow with no end.” Good job wrapping so many nuances into these few words.
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Thank you so much!
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Nicely done, Kate…lots of lovely visuals…I think an illustrator would have lots of fun with this story.
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Thank you, Vivian!
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Lovely lyrical sentences. I enjoyed this. Nice job.
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Hunting Dragons (50 words)
I’m bored. Woof.
Let’s pretend Duke’s a dragon!
Get the dragon!
Into the forest!
He soared over the swamp!
He flew up the mountain!
There he is!
He’s too strong!
Run! Woof!
Down the mountain!
Through the swamp!
Into the castle!
Stand our ground!
Hurray!
Hunting dragons is hard! Woof!
Thanks for reading (you can also see it here: https://www.erikammon.com/blog/2019/3/3/50preciouswords-entry)
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Filled with adventure and excitement. Sounds like Duke makes a fab dragon 🙂 Best of luck, Erik.
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I love how short sentences create an action packed chase, Erik! Good luck.
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Wow, you got action, adventure, imagination, and a best friend into 50 words! What a wonderful vignette of a child at play. I like the mirroring of action out and back as well. Really fun. Good luck.
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So thrilled to see everyone participating, Erik! And your story has great action…you managed to put me right there in the scene, hunting dragons with your characters…well done!
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Lot of action and great visuals. Great job.
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BIG BUG, SMALL BUG
(50 words)
By Susie Sawyer
Said Big Bug to Small,
“You pitiful crawler,
unfortunate you never grew.
I’ve never encountered
anything smaller.
You’d drown in a droplet of dew!”
Said Small Bug to Big,
“Indeed, you’re the winner.
You get more attention, it’s true.
For instance, that anteater
searching for dinner
is certainly noticing you.”
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Great story! Reminds me of Tortoise and the Hare. The ending is funny, a little pay back. A great lesson for kids.
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Love the ending!
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Thank you!! ❤
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Such fun rhythm, rhyme–all with an important (and darkly funny) lesson intertwined. Well done!
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Thanks Jolene! It was SO hard getting it to 50 words though!
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I like that spunky Small Bug! Good job!
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Hee hee! (me too!) Thank you! ❤
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This is fabulous, Susie. I love the rhyme and rhythm and your word choices! Great fun! Good luck!
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Ooooohhh, fabulous!?! Yay! Thank you so much!! ❤
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Big Bug is in big trouble now – Loved the surprise ending!
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Ha! Thank you! ❤
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I love your rhyme, and the ending is delightful! Good luck.
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Thank you Stephanie! ❤
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Great job with the rhythm and rhyme. What a fun piece. Bigger is not always better! Never seems to pay to be overly critical/judgmental of others. Good luck.
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Thank you so much, Maria! You’re right – we can all be reminded of that. 😉
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Love your rhyme, Susie…and your word choices are great! Plus, there’s a lesson to be learned and lots of humor!
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Thank you so much, Vivian – both for these encouraging words and for this opportunity! You are such a gift to the kidlit world! ❤
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Love it! Very clever. I love it when the underdog has got some sass! Nice rhyming too. Great job.
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Thank you so much!
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Baby Whisperers by Janie Riddle 50 words
I have baby whisperers.
When I cry my baby whisperers hold and rock me.
When my tummy hurts my baby whisperers rub my back
When my teeth hurt my baby whisperers rub my gums.
My baby whisperers are my uncle, aunt, cousin, and grandpa.
I smile for my baby whisperers.
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Lovely, Janie. I like that the story is from the baby’s viewpoint! Well done.
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Nice images from the babies POV. I like that the extended family are “baby whisperers.” Good luck.
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What a sweet story, Janie. I’d never heard the term ‘baby whisperers’..what a lucky baby to have so many. 😉
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Beautiful unique point of view. Nice job.
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Colored Pencils (49 words)
By: Michelle Hillen Klump
Beautiful castle. Sleeping prince. Warm sunbeams. Puffy clouds. Perfect day. Until…
Uh, oh!
Fire-breathing dragon swooping down.
Lucy the Dragon Slayer arrives. But her quiver is empty…
And the pencils are dull.
Twist.
Twist.
Sharpen.
Bowstring pulled taut.
Lucy’s arrow flies and hits its mark.
All is well again.
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It is amazing the story you can create with a bunch of colored pencils! Nice job, Michelle.
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thanks!
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I love this piece, Michelle. It would make for some great illustrations.
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I would love to see the illustrations. A little animated cartoon popped in my mind while reading. Well done!
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This would make a fun PB. Great images especially of Lucy and her crayons. So much action and suspense in so few words. Great job.
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This made me think of Harold and the Purple Crayon. Well done, Michelle…and I loved that Lucy comes to the rescus with her colored pencils and creativity.
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This is unique, a story within a story. Will make for fun illustrations. Love it.. Nice job.
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Caterpillar
(46 words)
By Betty Collerson
Chomp, chomp, chomp…
The ravenous caterpillar
wriggles from leaf to leaf,
gets fat and grows.
Then, one day…
it stops eating.
Wraps itself in a magic cape,
and presto! A chrysalis emerges.
Ten days later, give or take,
it sets free its most splendid host.
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I love the magic cape 🙂
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A complete metamorphosis in less than 50 words. Even has a magic cape. Nicely done.
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Great life cycle, Betty…and the magic cape is lovely!
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Nice, love the magic cape too. Lovely
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What a fun challenge – thanks for the opportunity!
Unstuck by Patrese Fischer (50 Words)
A wiggle and jiggle.
A pull and a tug.
Something is loose that once was snug.
I give it a yank.
But it is still stuck.
Maybe mom will have better luck?
My piggy bank is waiting.
And so am I.
Finally the tooth fairy has a reason to fly!
Twitter: @fairydogheaven
Website: http://www.fairydogheaven.com
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This is cute. I feel for the mc and his tooth.
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Unique losing-a-tooth story, Patrese. I absolutely love your first three lines. Well done!
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I love the title, Patrese, and ‘that once was stuck’ – nice tie in. Really great vignette of losing a tooth. Well done.
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There’s going to be one happy tooth fairy after this contest. Fun word choice and a great title.
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Love it! I liked …. Finally the tooth fairy has a reason to fly! made me smile. Nice job.
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Zainab Khan
50 Words
SAIMA’S STAIN
Saima wished to change her stain
How?
Scrub with an eraser?
Skin flaked. Not the stain.
Slather dollops of cream?
Too ghostlike (and sticky).
Sprinkle flecks of sand?
Saima moaned.
With everything mushed on, her stain was stained!
Saima twisted the tap.
Rinsed and smiled.
Her stain was back. Perfect!
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The last line should be “Her skin was back. Perfect.”
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I love the message in your vignette, Zainab – Be happy with who we are. Good luck in the contest.
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Thank you Julie. Best of luck to you too!
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“Learn to be happy in your own skin” is a powerful message. I really enjoyed the action and emotion you tap into throughout Saima’s journey to self-acceptance. Great job.
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Thank you Maria! It’s loosely based on a personal experience. Have fun on your fabulous trip. ❤
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So glad your mc was happy in the end with who she was and how she looked. Great message, Zainab!
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Thank you Vivian. We should all be happy about how we look and unfortunately, many kids aren’t happy with their appearance.
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Love the message here in this piece. Being happy with who you are is so important these days especially for kids. Nice job and good luck.
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