
Today is the day, dear friends! Ready! Set! Go! The #50PreciousWords 2018 Writing Challenge is now OPEN!

For those of you who have not participated before, let me give you a bit of back story. March 2nd is the birthday of the incredible Theodore Geisel, better known as Dr. Seuss. For the last two years, I’ve hosted a little contest based on Bennet Cerf’s challenge to Seuss to write a children’s book using only 50 words. And the classic Green Eggs and Ham was born. It’s true that the story has over 700 words…but only 50 unique words.
In 2016, I thought it would be fun to try to write a story for kids with ONLY 50 words. With a beginning, a middle, and an end. I wondered if I could do it. And then I opened the challenge to everyone. Much to my surprise and amazement, there were 128 entries! And last year, there were 253 entries. And I hope we have a great turnout again this year because I am passionate about helping others follow their dream of writing for children.
In 2012 I had a dream. I wanted to write picture books. And I wanted to be traditionally published. And one of the most important things I did was to participate in writing challenges like Susanna Hill’s contests. Why was that important? Because it got me writing. It got me revising. It got me submitting. Hmmm….writing/revising/submitting. I believe that if we do those three things enough times, our writing improves and agents and editors get a chance to see our work. And as much as I am thrilled with my own success, nothing makes me happier than to hear about the success of others in our kidlit community.
So, please sharpen your pencils. Fire up your computers. And share your #50PreciousWords with us.
#50 PRECIOUS WORDS WRITING CHALLENGE GUIDELINES
- Write a story appropriate for kids ages 12 or under, using only 50 words…they can all be different words, or you can use some of them over and over…just as long as the total word count of the story is 50 or less.
- It can be prose, rhyme, free verse, silly or serious…whatever works for you.
- Title is not included in the word count.
- No illustration notes please.
- Please post your story in the comment section below. If you have your own blog and want to post your story there also, please do. And let us know your post link. I ask for the link so that people will visit each other and find new friends in the kid lit community. Please make sure you put your name in the post. If you have any trouble at all posting the story, please email me and I will be happy to do it for you: viviankirkfield@gmail.com.
- Deadline for posting the story in the comments is Tuesday, March 6, at 11:59pm.
- Winners will be announced in a special blog post on Sunday, March 11.
- Winners? Of course, there will be winners…and prizes, too!
- A critique from my beloved agent, Essie White (some of you may remember that the winner of the first year’s contest chose Essie’s critique as her prize…and she subsequently signed with Storm Literary Agency and THAT story, plus a sequel to it, will be published next year!

- A picture book or chapter book or MG critique with Clear Fork editor Callie Metler-Smith.

- Your choice of ONE of the following from author, mentor, and founder of Sub Six FB group, Alayne Kay Christian: Picture Book critique or Chapter book critique (first three chapters), or Complimentary Art of Arc course.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Lori Degman.

- Your choice of either a picture book manuscript critique from author Karen Valenti or a seat in her Master Course on Picture Book Writing.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Melissa Stoller.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Amber Hendricks.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Katey Howes.

- Picture Book manuscript critique from author Julie Abery.

- Signed copy of OFFICER KATZ AND HOUNDINI from author Maria Gianferrari

- A piece of original signed art and a copy of LIZZIE AND LOU SEAL plus a silver seal necklace from author/illustrator Patricia Keeler.

- Rest & Relaxation package with two picture books and a surprise from author Maria Marshall.

- A signed copy of CAT IN THE CITY from author/illustrator Jill Weber.

- $15 credit in her TeachersPayTeachers store from Barbara Leyne(GradeOnederful)

A big thank you to all of our amazing prize donors! Much appreciation to illustrator Vicky Fang whose awesome logo graces our challenge! And a grateful thank you to my dear friends and critique buddies, Maria Marshall and Julie Abery who will be helping me read and comment.
Last year there were over 2000 comments – ALL OF THEM POSITIVE AND ENCOURAGING! I am so proud to be a part of this amazing kidlit community. Our news stations and politicians should definitely take a lesson from this kidlit community.
And before I leave you to post your stories and comment on those you have a chance to read, I thought it would only be fair if I posted my sample of a 50-word story which hopefully has a beginning, a middle, and an end.
WHY THE STARS TWINKLE (49 words)
It was Sun’s birthday.
Moon gathered paper, paint,
glitter and glue to make a card.
But Wind blew.
Glitter and glue covered the stars.
“Now I have no gift for Sun,” cried Moon.
“Twinkling stars are the best present of all,” said Sun.
And Moon glowed all night long.
The End
Remember, if you have any questions or concerns, please email me: viviankirkfield@gmail.com.
I am so looking forward to reading all of your precious words!
Wow, Vivian, what fantastic prizes you rustled up! Time to sharpen our pencils!
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First comment, Gabi…I think that deserves a prize…I’ll rustle up something just for you! And I can’t wait to read all of the fabulous and fun stories!
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Vivian, I am so grateful for this contest. This is my first time entering. I’m excited to read all the entries! All the best, Lily
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Love, love, love this contest, Vivian! 💛💛
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And I really appreciate your willingness to help this year, Julie! And thanks so very much for donating a critique as one of the prizes. There are going to be a bunch of awesome stories!
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What does my cat do when I’m at school?
Does he eat with a spoon?
Or fly to the moon?
Does he whip up a roast?
Or drive down the coast?
Play golf with my pa?
Or fix grandma’s car?
What does my cat do when I’m at school?
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Congralulations, Matt! You are a brave soul…you posted first. There will be a special prize for you!
What a fun story…I’ll bet lots of cat owners are wondering the same thing. 🙂
Well done!
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Our cat Max used to go missing all day. We had a game where we would guess what he got up to. Turns out the old guy next door was feeding him and letting him doze by his fire. Eventually Max disowned us altogether, though he would drop by occasionally for a scratch or to vomit on the carpet. Anyway, cool idea, and thanks inspiring me to try my hand at a picture book.
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Congratulations Matt! I love the imagery in your story. Great job!
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Nice work, Matt! Kids will be asking thier cats some questions after this one 🙂
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Matt, this is such a fun concept — very kid-friendly. And I can see some really fun illustrations with this story.
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I used to wonder the same thing. Well done!
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Great premise for a picture book. Was is it about cats… so aloof and sneaky!
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Matt, this is a fun story and one I’d bet many kids think about. Good luck.
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How fun. I wish my cat would make dinner. Then again, maybe not. I may not like his food choice…lol. Thanks for kicking us off and for starting a cat trend!!!
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Oh wow, thanks for the comments. What a lovely bunch of people you all are.
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“Domestication”
Heavy rain sends Cat scurrying for cover.
Under the porch roof, he shakes himself dry.
He runs when he sees little faces spying.
But he’s back next time it rains.
This time a bowl of food waits. He eats.
He still thinks he’s wild.
They’ve already chosen his name.
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Thanks so much for joining in the fun, Teresa! Your story has lots of heart…I especially love the last two lines. 😉
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Awww, sounds like he is adopted Teresa! I can just imagine the ‘little faces spying’ – lovely!
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I love the ending! I can just picture the kids’ faces watching the wet cat.
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Vivian, I had to post a cat story too. Being that it’s the trend this year; and, being that I have seven cats who, once they heard that there were so many cat story posted, they insisted. They said they would never forgive me if I didn’t. ~Vicki
Little Cat
Come sit with me
little cat
Come sit with me
upon my bed
Come sit with me
let’s read a book
Come sit with me
my pillow’s soft
Come sit with me
and stay the night
Come sit with me
my room’s so dark
Come sit with me, won’t you?…please.
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*so many cat stories posted…
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Willow, It’s always such a challenge at times to get the cat to come snuggle. Your story portrays the way, even though you know they want to (and usually do) snuggle, they sure take their sweet time getting there. 🙂 Good luck.
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You’ve asked so sweetly, Vicky…I don’t know how your kitty could refuse. 😉 There must be a ton of cat lovers here…because I scanned the stories quickly and there are LOTS of feline tales. 😉
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So can I still enter if I am a “Dog Person”? LOL. I love these cat stories!
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A very charming story. I can feel the narrator’s desire for companionship building up through to the night and into the dark. Hope the magic word works in the end! Good luck!
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Never met a kitty yet that would pass up a soft pillow and a good story.
Thank you Anne or Ann (with no e)! Best of luck to you as well 🙂
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Cats do need a little enticing, don’t they? Such a sweet, gentle story.
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Thank you Cynthia! That they do…food does help though 🙂
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Teresa, I love the ending. Many a domestic cat still “thinks” they’re wild. This would be fun to expanded and see how long the two sides are apart and what “detente” is created at the end.
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Sorry Teresa…not sure how I ended up posting my story on your thread. i love your kitty story and people who give homeless kitties a home…even those who don’t think they want a home 🙂
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No worries, Willlowwrites! I liked your story, too. It’s hilarious that there are so many cat stories here.
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Such a sweet ending!
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Wonderful ending, Teresa!
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Love how this story “sticks” with the reader long after it’s read. Great job!
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Thanks, Vivian for this interesting challenge and wonderful opportunity.
It seems I’m third in line with a story about a feline…
Check it out on my blog here:
http://suehodara.com/author-blog/2018/03/02/50-precious-words/
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Just in case… I’ll paste my story here as well! 🙂
An Unlikely Pair (44 words)
A crow became smitten
with an orphaned kitten.
Mama bird took such good care of the cat in need,
that the unlikely pair became best friends indeed.
Little Fur and Big Feather always stuck together–
playing their days away in all kinds of weather…
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What are the odds, Sue, of the first three stories touching on the subject of cats? I love your characters’ names…Little Fur and Big Feather…maybe this needs to be a series. 😉 Nice job!!
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Vivian, I’d be over the moon to turn this into a series! 😉
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Definitely has promise.
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Thanks, Maria. 🙂
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I can just imagine the illustrations for this – how cute!
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Julie,
Thanks!
I liked your submission as well. I’d heard about DinDim and Mister Joao… You relayed the story beautifully. 🙂
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What a cute rhyming story!
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Thanks! It was fun to write. 🙂
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I agree with the others. I can see this becoming a series! Good job!
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Thanks, Ellen! Wasn’t even thinking series when I wrote it… But the suggestion is a nice one. 😉
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Love the image of the mama crow taking care of the kitten. Sweet story!
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Thanks, Gaby! (Sorry I didn’t get back to you earlier…We’ve been having internet trouble…) It just goes to show that love always finds a way, even between “natural enemies”. 🙂
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What a cute and fun little rhyming story!
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Thanks, Laurel. (As above, sorry for not getting back to you earlier… finally got internet restored today…) Sometimes a story just sings in rhyme, and this was one such story. 🙂
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As part of Renee LaTulippe’s Lyrical Language Lab course, I wrote a double dactyl poem (well, a pair of them, so I guess this is a double-double dactyl, making its debut)!. I’m excited to share it here! 50 words, on the nose. (And how funny, my story ALSO features a cat. What is that, 4 in a row? HAHA!)
FICKLE FLOWER PICKING by Jennifer Broedel
(50 words)
Pranciful, shmanciful,
Frannie the fanciful
frolicked through fields that were
filled to the brim.
Finding that flowers, by
fundamentality,
frazzled her feline, she
flung them from him.
Tickledy, prickledy
Felix McFickledy,
sick of each flickering,
fluttering bloom,
Dug up the daisies, a
disciplinarian,
cursing the crocus for
taking up room.
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Oh WOW…I remember when I had to write that exercise for Renee…it was totally hard and totally fun! And I love yours, Jennifer. Your character names are so much fun! And your alliteration if great! Thanks for playing along and for shouting out on social media!
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Thank you, Vivian! And thanks for hosting this delightful challenge!
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I remember those double dactyls well. Your story is adorable and so fun to read.
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Lovely Jennifer! Wonderful meter and alliteration! Well done!
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Thank you- I’m really satisfied with the employment of those tools! 😉 Isn’t it so exciting when word play plays out well? It makes writing all the more fun, and that’s saying something. Writing is just about my favorite thing to do, these days.
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Oh, wonderful! I loved Renee’s course, and I adore double dactyls. This is such a bouncy story with great character names and wonderful nonsense words — kids will adore it.
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Thank you! That was a fun assignment, and so timely! (Who’d have guessed so many entries about cats would come in such quick succession? HAHA!)
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This is just plain fun!!
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Thanks for the kind words!
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This is so fun to read! Great job.
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Jennifer, I too remember doing this exercise. It was actually a lot of fun (though hard). I too really like your character’s names. Good luck.
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So much fun, Jennifer!!
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Jennifer this was so much fun to read, great job!
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So fun! I love the language.
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A fun one to read aloud!
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Love the language in this one!
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I remember this challenge from LLL, too. Well done!
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“What’s Black and White and Green All Over?”
A penguin ate a pickle.
It gave his throat a tickle.
He saw it when the keeper dropped it.
Straight into his mouth he popped it.
The odd addition to his lunch
Disappeared, munch munch munch.
He didn’t like it in the least.
‘Twas not the hoped for fishy feast.
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Fab title Chele! Such a funny little ditty…poor penguin, bet he won’t be scavenging again in a hurry! Good luck.
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Haha! This story is so cute and I can imagine funny illustrations to go along. Great idea and nice writing.
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I really love this. I think it’s my favorite so far. I am so curious where you got the idea.
I’m actually very impressed by so many of these stories. It’s so hard to write in 50 words or less. I’m amazed by the variety of stories here. I can’t “like” them individually because I am not a member of WordPress. But wanted to say how I have enjoyed reading the entries. And what a fun contest I think this is!
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Chele…I can just see the illustrations for this…so funny! Poor Penguin…’twas not the hoped for fishy feast’…great ending to a well done rhyme!
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Oh, poor penguin. Cute story!
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A penguin and a pickle…What a combination! Great idea that would provide funny illustrations. Can almost hear the children’ laughter!
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Silly little penguin. Great illustration potential for the misimpression of a pickle/anchovy. Love the ending line! Good luck.
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Great combination…a penguin and a pickle!
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I love the title too. Poor penguin, didn’t get the lunch he wanted. Sad stories are always the best.
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Ha! So funny!
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What fun! Thanks for the contest.
My story–titled “Magnify Me!”–is nonfiction and also in verse. It can also be found on my website at http://www.heatherkinser.com/inspiration/50-precious-words-challenge-2018
*****
Mallard swims and braves the weather
in a raincoat made of feather.
Feather? What a silly coat!
Can it really help him float?
…Magnify me!
What do you see?
Tiny branching barbs and hooks
offer more than handsome looks—
trapping heat and blocking wet.
…How much closer can YOU get?
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Good rhyming Heather, and I love that this shares some nature terminology for kids to learn! Great job!
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I like this a lot Heather. Might be my favorite so far. Nice job and great rhyme.
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Wow, rhyming nonfiction — I love it. With illustrations showing the magnified feathers, how cool will this book be? Great!
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What a clever idea for a nonfiction science book, Heather! I love the ‘raincoat made of feather”..and the detailed science facts worked in so effortlessly…nice job! I hope you pursue this one and add other animals.
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Great ‘teaching’ story!
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Heather – This is awesome. I would love to see this expanded out into a PB that looked really close at different animals “coats.” Best of luck.
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Well done! Rhyme and science perfectly melded. I want to read and see a whole book of these rhymes!
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Aha! I finally figured out how to comment on my new iPad. I think this is an amazing entry! First, I love rhyme. Second, there’s a puzzle posed which is always fun,and finally, the answer is fascinating and TRUE! All in 50 words, impressive!
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Heather this is such a clever idea of rhyming non-fiction. I love the idea of learning about the coats of animals, and magnifying them is brilliant. Best of luck to you.
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I like the idea of moving the reader closer to see what the feathers are really like.
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“raincoat made of feather” is such a great description!
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Fantastic rhyming and lyrical story incorporating animal science in so few words! Love the “raincoat made of feather” and “tiny branching barbs and hooks.” You hooked me!
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So clever and spot-on rhyme and meter!
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Great job Heather!
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Love the natural science bringing kids closer to nature. Beautiful.
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I just LOVE this contest! Thank you, Vivian! My entry titled, Vroom – Vroom can also be seen on my website listed below. Good luck everyone!
https://chattytcp.wordpress.com/2018/02/20/monster-trucks/
VROOM VROOM (49)
Monster trucks roar.
Monster trucks rumble.
They turn on their engines
and get ready to tumble
V V
R R
O O
O O
M M
they’re off.
Hold your ears.
Big tough trucks
are shifting gears
V V
R R
O O
O O
M M
Loud thundering sound,
leaping up and over
that humongous dirt mound.
Crash – Smash to the ground!
V V
R R
O O
O O
M M
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Vroom! Feel like I am watching the monster trucks now! Nice job Tracy! I can see this as a board book. Good luck!
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Thank you so much!
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OH, this has a really good “monster truck” energy. And I know plenty of truck-crazy kids who will just eat it up. Amazing what you can do in 50 words!
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Thank you for your kind words, Christy!
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I’m right there at the monster truck shows they used to advertise when I lived in Connecticut at the Hartford Colliseum. Great rhyme and action, Tracy…I love it and kids will, too!
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Love the sounds of this story!
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Tracy what a fun story and great use of sound and format. Good Luck.
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Another fun one to read aloud!
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I can think of several children who would absolutely love this story!
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Love this fun and visual story! Great job!
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After the Rain (50 words)
It’s red and orange
It’s yellow and green
It’s the most mystical thing
That you’ve ever seen!
It’s blue and violet
It arcs in the sky
It appears after rain
But it’s almost shy
It doesn’t stay long
Where does it go?
Why did it come
and give a show?
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What a nice way to capture a fading rainbow!
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Everyone loves a rainbow!!! Lovely!! Good luck!
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I love that you told us all about a rainbow without saying the word…and I love your title! And you are right…rainbows are shy…they disappear quickly sometimes…just when you get a good look at them. Thank you so much for joining in the #50PreciousWord fun, Jay!
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Thank you so much for the opportunity Vivian
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Rainbows are mystical! Love the idea of a shy rainbow.
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Great way to remain as mysterious as the rainbow you are describing. You capture and relay both the excitement of seeing it and the disappointment at its fleetingness. Best of Luck.
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Ah, another rhyming puzzle poem! Love these!
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This is beautiful :o)
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I like this picture of a rainbow!
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The last line really begs for you to say ‘rainbow’ out loud. Wonderful!
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Why I’m No Longer a Cowboy (50 words)
It’s harder than I realized, to drive cattle without getting caught.
We made it halfway to the ranch; I guess it was just too hot.
My cows are stuck in the shade! I’ve heaved, pushed and prodded.
They won’t budge a single inch, and when I gave up they applauded.
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Being a cowboy sounds like a lot of hard work! Good luck, Stephanie!
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I can just picture the herd of cows applauding! What a great image! This is really fun to read and I love the rhyme of “prodded” and “applauded.”
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Stephanie…what a fabulous title! And I can see this will be a very funny picture book if you keep going with it. Cows applauding when the wrangler has to stop the cattle drive – that is hilarious! You’ve got great imagery here!
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Thanks for hosting this fun contest, Vivian! There are so many great entries and it really got me thinking 🙂
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Ha! I can just picture applauding cows – giggle.
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Your ending made me laugh. This is just begging to be expanded on and made into a PB!
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Stephanie, I agree applauding cows is hilarious. Poor cowboy. Good luck
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Last line made me laugh out loud. I can just see those cows applauding.
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Ha! What a fantastic last line!
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Great closing Stephanie, and a fantastic visual with the cows applauding. Good luck!
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Love this contest!
STUCK
“Mom! My rocket’s stuck in the tree!”
“Throw something at it! Mom yelled.
I tried a stick. It got stuck.
I tried my football. It fell back on my forehead.
I tried my baseball bat. It broke the branch,
No rocket…
I picked up the cat.
Mom came running…FAST!
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Hah, great ending! And there is some great fodder for illustrations in this terrific kid-solves-their-own-problem manuscript.
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What fun, Kathy! And mom to the rescue…you surprised me at the end…I was sure he would try the cat as well. So glad you hopped on board for this challenge!
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Oh, no! How funny.
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So glad mom rescued the cat. Just shows the literalism of kids. Nicely done.
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Love it!! The ending is the best ‘)
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Hi Kathy, I agree with the others…great ending! Can just see Mum chasing out! Good luck!
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Scared me for a minute. So funny!
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This really made me laugh. Great reaction from Mom :o)
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So funny! Love the ending!
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So funny and relatable. Fabulous ending!
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How to Survive a Piano Recital (49 words)
Practice
Memorize
Practice
Memorize
Backstage butterflies
Beast waits, open-jawed
Take a seat
Deep breath
Music download, brain to fingers
Breeze through tricky passage
Get stuck
Rewind, try again
Nope
Heart pounds
Think
Breathe
Improvise
Big chord
Grand finale
Smile
Bow
Woohoo!
Next spring
Start again
Practice
Memorize
Backstage butterflies
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I can absolutely feel the tension in this piece! Great word choices and flow, Paulette!
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Paulette…this is so good! You put me right on the stage with the mc. And I felt the drama…and the ending is perfect. I love when the endings of a picturee book echo the beginning. 😉
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Oh, this is great! It really conveys that stage-fright so well (she says, from personal experience). I like the poetic word choices and the circular ending, coming back around to do it again after surviving. Nicely done.
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Paulette, Oh those dreaded recitals. Love the image of a piano as an open jawed beast and the circular ending. Good luck.
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I could feel the tension in this too. You do a great job in capturing the fear and excitement of piano recitals. When I was in recitals as a child, I remember feeling like my fingers were moving on their own.
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“… like my fingers were moving on their own” — I felt that way too! Perfect description.
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Wow–you’ve packed a lot into 49 words! Very nice.
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Great job with this one!
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I remember those butterflies. You captured the emotions of the recital well!
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Terrific story. Took me right there. I love that mistakes are built in to the recital.
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Count with Me! (50 words)
One! Two! Three!
Sang teeny-tiny flea.
Four! Five! Six!
Barked puppy-dog mix.
Seven! Eight! Nine!
Oinked pink-piggy swine.
Ten!
Crowed rooster to hen.
Ten! Nine! Eight!
Grumbled alligator’s mate.
Seven! Six! Five!
Buzzed the bees by the hive.
Four! Three! Two!
Cooed joey kangaroo.
One!
Growled cheetah on the run.
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Wonderful! Great rhyme and meter, Amanda! Good luck!
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Thank you!
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Love the up and down counting and the animals you chose, Amanda. I’m assuming you are Amanda since Julie named you in her comment. 😉 This would make a cute board book for wee ones. 😉
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Thank you, Vivian! (For the contest and the comment) Yes, my name is Amanda. 🙂
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I like the counting up and down two. Fun!
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Goodnight My Bouncy Bison! 49 words
Bouncy bison wants to play,
He wants to bounce everyday!
Rolling and romping all around,
Bouncy bison kicks the ground.
Mama Bison says, “time for bed,
It’s time to rest your bison head.”
Bouncy Bison raced on the grass,
He closed his eyes at last!
Goodnight my bouncy bison!
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Love the rhyme and pace of your story!
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A cute bedtime story for a wee one!
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Hello Lily,
Just found your story in the comments on Amanda’s story! Thank you for playing along with your bouncy rhyme. 😉 Lots of fun!
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Great counting story. I enjoyed the unusual combination of animals. Good luck.
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Thank you!
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I know others have mentioned it, but I love the originality of counting down as well as up. Very ingenious and imaginative use of language, too. Good luck! -Anne Lipton
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Thank you!
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I love the story arc for your counting story! It is hard for me to make concept stories with an arc, but this feels complete. It is really fun, too! Great job!
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Thanks Erin!
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Nice visuals! Great work!
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BABY SMILES
By Rachel Funez
49 words
Baby smiles;
She wants to play.
Mamma tickles.
Mamma seeks.
Mamma lifts the sheet and peaks.
Baby cries;
She’s feeling sad.
Mamma hugs her.
Mamma sways.
Mamma wipes the tears away.
Baby sighs;
She’s tired now.
Mamma cuddles.
Mamma sings.
Mamma rocks, and walks, and swings.
Night, night, Baby.
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This is a lovely manuscript; it reads almost like a lullaby. So sweet!
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Thank you, Christy! It was inspired by my 2 year old, who calls herself “baby” and likes to say “baby cry, mamma hug.”
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How lovely! Great job Rachel!
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Thank you! I love your penguin story, too! I’m a bit partial to penguins, and love that it’s an inspiring true story.
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Perfect bedtime story for little ones, Rachel! I love your gentle rhythmic verses. Thank you so much for joining in the challenge!
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Thank you! It’s such a fun challenge. Thanks for offering it!
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I also love your story about the sun, moon and stars, Vivian.
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Very sweet and gentle story of Mom and child. Perfect for bedtime. Good luck.
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Thank you!
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This is a nod to Alexander’s Terrible, Horrible, No Good, Very Bad Day. By Judith Viorst
Eli’s Day
First,
I spilled cereal on my favorite pants.
At circle time,
no one sat next to me.
Then I skinned my knee,
without a boo-boo kiss.
And squiggles danced around the page,
teasing me.
But stepping off the bus,
a hug was waiting.
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Isn’t that the very best way to end a bad day! Full of heart, Rebecca! Lovely.
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Thanks so much. I agree. It is the very best way to end a tough day!
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This is a great Alexander tribute. It really zips along with some great word choices (in particular, “squiggles danced around the page.” And I love the ending.
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Thanks, Christy! I’m glad the pacing worked. I’ve often thought about kids struggling with reading and how difficult that is.
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Nothing like that hug at the end of any day, especially a bad one. I too liked “squiggles danced around the page,” what a great image. Best of luck.
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Thanks, Maria. I agree about the power of a hug. I appreciate you calling out the image I conveyed. Struggling with reading is so tough for kids.
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‘I skinned my knee without a boo-boo kiss. That says it all, Rebecca. Every child will relate to that feeling of not having mom close by. Lovely story of a young child’s day…I felt all the emotions…well done!!!
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Thanks, Vivian, both for your feedback and for creating this community of supportive writers.
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I felt this all the way through. Good luck to you.
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Thanks, Jean. I’m glad the emotion came through.
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Full story arc in only 50 words and perfect ending — well done!
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Going out on submission…entry removed at request of author.
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What an interesting play on “field day” with salad fixings. Really fun. Loved the action and images you portrayed. Good Luck.
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This is so clever, Katie! I love the vegetable action…unique and the imagery is awesome. Thank you so much for participating in #50PreciousWords!
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This is fun Katie! Nice rhymes and some great word choices here! Good luck!
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Very clever! Love your use of veggies.
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So original and fun. Well done!
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